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Old 06-19-2016, 12:50 AM   #9
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I mean, there a multiple touchstones that make this read like some subtle subversive parody of dead man. The specific use of periods leading into sentences that are just referential noun sentences. The formatting. The use of 'and'. I don't think it's an outright satire, although I did at first. But it's definitely not a pure big baby thought, in verse. Or if it is, it's something different than I'm used to. The writing was, as usual, top notch. As a stylist you're the best the site has. No one, besides your cadre of (ALIASES!? HOW DOES THE RABBET HOLEZ GO122!) associates, can match your output of technical rhyme skill while carrying a point. IS THIS THE SACRED SIMULACRUM THAT I'VE HEARD WORD OF!? You should work towards writing a verse without some universe phenomenon. We understand all about supernovae at this point, I think. I guess I'm meandering around real feed because I'm not sure if this is a 'serious' (lol) bb work, or some practical joke worked to perfect execution. As a piece of writing, to netcees' open mic standards, it's obviously fantastic. So that's all you need, really. Keep on lasering. Thanks for the read!
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