Week 12: Asylum vs. Mr. J [MR. J 3-2]

Razah · 05-26-2016, 12:20 PM

Decent battle. I've seen better from both, especially asylum.

Asylum is pretty hit or miss to me. Sometimes I'll read a verse from you & be impressed, because it's a notch or two higher than your usual writing. This time around, it felt kind of blah homie. The take on the topic was okay, the wording was a little too wordy, stretched, just didn't have that smoothness to it. Sometimes it could be the topics we have, or the little amount of time we have to put a verse together - Also, I think it was you that said you had the flu or something. That sucks bruh, at least you showed. If that was you, appreciate ya' taking one for the team. Decent verse though, I expect more fire from you!

Mr. J, not your best shit ever. It was cool though, I liked the squirrel reference. If I remember right, that character was in some diddy kong racing game. Anyways, I honestly laughed with that "hehehe" bar. It wasn't even funny, I just felt like putting "heheheh" in your bar, made it funny. If I didn't remember "Conker", this would've just been some story you created. But, I'm glad you can draw inspiration from something like that & make a decent verse out of it.

Once again, not the best verses from these guys, but both were decent drops, although I felt Asylum's was a bit too wordy for my liking and Mr. J's just read better. Thanks for the read guys.

vMr. J

05-26-2016, 12:20 PM	#4
Razah rockkFresh Join Date: Apr 2015 Location: Chicago. Posts: 1,088 Battle Record: 8-10 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 11328545	Decent battle. I've seen better from both, especially asylum. Asylum is pretty hit or miss to me. Sometimes I'll read a verse from you & be impressed, because it's a notch or two higher than your usual writing. This time around, it felt kind of blah homie. The take on the topic was okay, the wording was a little too wordy, stretched, just didn't have that smoothness to it. Sometimes it could be the topics we have, or the little amount of time we have to put a verse together - Also, I think it was you that said you had the flu or something. That sucks bruh, at least you showed. If that was you, appreciate ya' taking one for the team. Decent verse though, I expect more fire from you! Mr. J, not your best shit ever. It was cool though, I liked the squirrel reference. If I remember right, that character was in some diddy kong racing game. Anyways, I honestly laughed with that "hehehe" bar. It wasn't even funny, I just felt like putting "heheheh" in your bar, made it funny. If I didn't remember "Conker", this would've just been some story you created. But, I'm glad you can draw inspiration from something like that & make a decent verse out of it. Once again, not the best verses from these guys, but both were decent drops, although I felt Asylum's was a bit too wordy for my liking and Mr. J's just read better. Thanks for the read guys. vMr. J