Week 11: Adverse vs Breathless [ADVERSE 4-0]

asylum · 05-19-2016, 02:36 AM

Adverse, your beggning was pretty good but you really stared heating up halfway thru. Dropping breathless name was dope tho, respect. Wasn’t really feeling “feeble” collar, idk. That stuck out to me. At times this piece feels like a statement about our inner struggle, between our good and bad sides. Dope piece.
Breath this was a cool piece bro, I enjoyed it. Not usually a fan of line breaks but you were all over the place so I’m not mad about it. I appreciate your participation G, I do. But I’ve read some really developed , well thought out pieces from you before. If this was one of them, I’m sorry it went over my head. But anything you write is enjoyable, so I appreciate your effort and enjoyed the read.
/v adverse for a better take on the topic.

05-19-2016, 02:36 AM	#6
asylum Senior Member Join Date: Sep 2014 Posts: 999 Battle Record: 7-5 Rep Power: 8214211	Adverse, your beggning was pretty good but you really stared heating up halfway thru. Dropping breathless name was dope tho, respect. Wasn’t really feeling “feeble” collar, idk. That stuck out to me. At times this piece feels like a statement about our inner struggle, between our good and bad sides. Dope piece. Breath this was a cool piece bro, I enjoyed it. Not usually a fan of line breaks but you were all over the place so I’m not mad about it. I appreciate your participation G, I do. But I’ve read some really developed , well thought out pieces from you before. If this was one of them, I’m sorry it went over my head. But anything you write is enjoyable, so I appreciate your effort and enjoyed the read. /v adverse for a better take on the topic.