Week 10 Contendership Match: NYCSPITZ vs Breathless [NYCSPITZ WINS 7-0 SHUTOUT]

Adverse · 05-13-2016, 01:25 AM

NYC, I really like your futuristic, post apocalyptic setting. Your imagery explained the scene and painted a great picture in my head. Kind of gave me Gears of War vibes, I'm not quite sure why my mind went exactly to that but I really appreciated your vocabulary and the way you put the scenary and plot together. Good work.

Breathless, I liked your descriptive approach as well. It was a cool little section where I almost felt like I was going on the trip for your character, alas, I thought there were things you could have expanded on more and put more of a effort into the piece overall. Wasn't a bad verse, but NYC's took the cake here. Awesome picture he painted. Good work fellas

V/Nyc

05-13-2016, 01:25 AM	#1
Adverse low tide in serotonin bay Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 2,752 Battle Record: 37-28 Champed - GWL Picture Challenge - Guerrilla Writing League - Black August II Rep Power: 15446146	NYC, I really like your futuristic, post apocalyptic setting. Your imagery explained the scene and painted a great picture in my head. Kind of gave me Gears of War vibes, I'm not quite sure why my mind went exactly to that but I really appreciated your vocabulary and the way you put the scenary and plot together. Good work. Breathless, I liked your descriptive approach as well. It was a cool little section where I almost felt like I was going on the trip for your character, alas, I thought there were things you could have expanded on more and put more of a effort into the piece overall. Wasn't a bad verse, but NYC's took the cake here. Awesome picture he painted. Good work fellas V/Nyc