Week 10: Timeless vs Frank [TIMELESS WINS 5-0 SHUTOUT]

Artifice · 05-12-2016, 10:36 AM

I got timeless taking this one...

frank I felt like this was not up to your usual standard. I felt like the flow was choppy in places and the plot just didn't work for me... there was def some cool imagery and there were parts I enjoyed, but as a whole it felt like you maybe rushed it or didn't give it your all...

timeless this piece was real dope. I dug it from start to finish, in the middle I wavered for a moment, but got right back into it. Flow was smooth and there were a few parts that I thought were really cool, the black & white chase the rabbit line and a few others... solid writing here.

v/ timeless

05-12-2016, 10:36 AM	#3
Artifice Senior Member Join Date: Mar 2016 Posts: 269 Battle Record: 17-9 Champed - Art Of Writing League - GWL Picture Challenge Rep Power: 3944949	I got timeless taking this one... frank I felt like this was not up to your usual standard. I felt like the flow was choppy in places and the plot just didn't work for me... there was def some cool imagery and there were parts I enjoyed, but as a whole it felt like you maybe rushed it or didn't give it your all... timeless this piece was real dope. I dug it from start to finish, in the middle I wavered for a moment, but got right back into it. Flow was smooth and there were a few parts that I thought were really cool, the black & white chase the rabbit line and a few others... solid writing here. v/ timeless