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Old 05-12-2016, 01:26 AM   #6
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Witty, you put together a decent key.
the flow is what made it such an easy read
my issue is that it wasn't really drawn out
its nice to see you come through & throw some bars down
but even if your opponent doesnt reply but that work in.
this was pretty cool though, especially for one of your sober verses.

JESODIST, perhaps you been away for far too long?
there were spelling errors & the rhymes were a futon.
you folded underneath your own weight & fell hard bruh
I thought the story was ok but it seemed like a card bluff.
you bet it all on black & you ended up in a twisted world
I was confused by the small piece of dialogue, but...get it girl.


v/Witty, although Witty had a lighthearted piece it worked.
Jesodists style is a breath of fresh air but not his best verse.
both had their issues, Witty wrote short, Jesodist went wild
Jesodist took the darker route & Witty left me with a smile.
Jesodists errors are just too vast for me to brush off...
from sadium to traitorous bastard gasp & implore comes off...
well it comes off kind of odd...my vote goes to Witty...
his verse was proper & the structure wasnt too shitty
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