Week 9 Contenders Match: (3-0) Adverse vs. (3-1) MMLP (ADVERSE WINS 4-1)

NYCSPITZ · 05-05-2016, 01:16 AM

Cool battle, I thought MMLP had a funny take on it but maybe it was a bit too cliche. Getting into Prince's mind and writing like that was cool though, just thought you could've switched the narration up a bit, maybe use a different point of view to tell the story like first person...it was good but not as good as your animal story IMO, which was dope.

I thought adverse had a cool verse. It was pretty fleshed out and seemed to have a strong current connecting the whole. It seemed like a mental monologue/dream sequence where he's displaying himself to the audience. The verse had a sort of soul to it you can't deny, it was cool yet maybe it would've been helped with a jarring sequence or two sprinkled in to change pace a bit. Overall nice battle.

V/ adverse

05-05-2016, 01:16 AM	#1
NYCSPITZ SYRACUSE Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,031 Battle Record: 31-37 Champed - Write Night II - Alias Topical Tournament Rep Power: 4743547	Cool battle, I thought MMLP had a funny take on it but maybe it was a bit too cliche. Getting into Prince's mind and writing like that was cool though, just thought you could've switched the narration up a bit, maybe use a different point of view to tell the story like first person...it was good but not as good as your animal story IMO, which was dope. I thought adverse had a cool verse. It was pretty fleshed out and seemed to have a strong current connecting the whole. It seemed like a mental monologue/dream sequence where he's displaying himself to the audience. The verse had a sort of soul to it you can't deny, it was cool yet maybe it would've been helped with a jarring sequence or two sprinkled in to change pace a bit. Overall nice battle. V/ adverse __________________ UNIFIED THEORY