Nationaliesm

Zen · 05-13-2013, 12:13 PM

You've been feeding the shit out of everything in the OM so props on that and here's your feed as promised. This was a good read here. Although if I had to be honest the red portion of the verse was the strongest while it seemed to fall off after it. The wording in the red section was phenomenal really.

Pattern decked fabric at an altitude the lands can't reach.
Flapping in the atmospheres gasps, matching flickers of heat.
Red stripes, licorice like, increasing vanity
and Uncle Sams purple crayon set crafts mountains majesty.
Amber waves of travesty, burn morals and land
while the glare the flare produces blinds women, children and man
to every horror that stands, whether current or past;
Focused calamity through manning of a magnifying glass.
^^This section of the red part in particular was extremely dope to me.

Very nice read about something I love to write about all the time so obviously I enjoyed this. Great read and I'm glad you're active in the OM man. Keep droppin.

05-13-2013, 12:13 PM	#5
Zen Arm the Homeless Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,102 Battle Record: 22-24 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 35079722	You've been feeding the shit out of everything in the OM so props on that and here's your feed as promised. This was a good read here. Although if I had to be honest the red portion of the verse was the strongest while it seemed to fall off after it. The wording in the red section was phenomenal really. Pattern decked fabric at an altitude the lands can't reach. Flapping in the atmospheres gasps, matching flickers of heat. Red stripes, licorice like, increasing vanity and Uncle Sams purple crayon set crafts mountains majesty. Amber waves of travesty, burn morals and land while the glare the flare produces blinds women, children and man to every horror that stands, whether current or past; Focused calamity through manning of a magnifying glass. ^^This section of the red part in particular was extremely dope to me. Very nice read about something I love to write about all the time so obviously I enjoyed this. Great read and I'm glad you're active in the OM man. Keep droppin.