Week 7: Mr. J vs. Artifice (ARTIFICE WINS 7-0 SHUTOUT)

timeless · 04-19-2016, 11:58 AM

Art, I was like FUCK when I seen you started this off rhyming nothing/something. This verse is a classic example of a writer with a very high ceiling. There are so many words and ideas in this verse that can be rearranged to make it more defining. However, I'm not saying this was bad this verse was awesome. Your flow and grasp for bringing a complete feel comes natural. Unless your an alias, I've never read your work aside from what I've seen in this league, but I see you hitting your prime very soon and not letting up.

Jerry, I can appreciate your simple approach, as you do often, but it just didn't work this time. It started off slow, and never really blew up at all. 'Weird paradox' and a couple other spots made it seem like you were knew at this writing this. Seemed like a last minute keystyle with little to no planning or editing. Def seen better from you past couple weeks bro.

V. Art

04-19-2016, 11:58 AM	#6
timeless past tense Join Date: Nov 2013 Location: NJ Posts: 1,623 Battle Record: 22-39 Rep Power: 4341329	Art, I was like FUCK when I seen you started this off rhyming nothing/something. This verse is a classic example of a writer with a very high ceiling. There are so many words and ideas in this verse that can be rearranged to make it more defining. However, I'm not saying this was bad this verse was awesome. Your flow and grasp for bringing a complete feel comes natural. Unless your an alias, I've never read your work aside from what I've seen in this league, but I see you hitting your prime very soon and not letting up. Jerry, I can appreciate your simple approach, as you do often, but it just didn't work this time. It started off slow, and never really blew up at all. 'Weird paradox' and a couple other spots made it seem like you were knew at this writing this. Seemed like a last minute keystyle with little to no planning or editing. Def seen better from you past couple weeks bro. V. Art