Week 7: Jesodist vs. Innovator (JESODIST WINS 7-3)

timeless · 04-19-2016, 11:43 AM

Fatt sajak, solid second stanza, much better than the rift of uncertainty you started us off with. Still not sure how you related to the topic tbh. Def could've came stronger here, seems like you rushed it..

Jesus dust, rhyming for the sake of rhyming with capitals so we don't get lost in what you are rhyming. Got you. This had 2trip written all over it. Not to say your ambition wasn't there it just wasn't achieved.

V. Innovator for more of a complete, less diluted, more enjoyable read.

04-19-2016, 11:43 AM	#9
timeless past tense Join Date: Nov 2013 Location: NJ Posts: 1,623 Battle Record: 22-39 Rep Power: 4341329	Fatt sajak, solid second stanza, much better than the rift of uncertainty you started us off with. Still not sure how you related to the topic tbh. Def could've came stronger here, seems like you rushed it.. Jesus dust, rhyming for the sake of rhyming with capitals so we don't get lost in what you are rhyming. Got you. This had 2trip written all over it. Not to say your ambition wasn't there it just wasn't achieved. V. Innovator for more of a complete, less diluted, more enjoyable read.