Week 6: Asylum vs. Mr. J (MR. J WINS 5-2)

[symetrik]

mr. j's piece

hawt

Im allowed to use a gift I was once denied...
one I've taken for granted for most of my life
Im alive I think.. Yes my senses replied.

before, I enjoyed it briefly. now, it completes me
Im overtaken by Spring as I breathe in deeply.

the second quote especially. first line is clean af.

nawt

my standard is lowered, yet immersive
my senses tingle with each diversion.
Rays of light blind me upon emergence

just seemed forced? big words man. they ain't my friends.

asylum's piece

hawt

An empty door hangs on the hinge of an animal’s cage,
holding within a handwritten page, weathered and aged.
Well wishes littered with pleasure and rage, a measure of shame,

layers of plaster arranged and engraved with names and patterns of praise,

nawt

It’s pretense keeps secrets from the actors preaching it’s creed,

possessive!

mvgt: mr. j for a piece that dealt head on with reality.