The Art Of Confession(Genocide, Natural, and EndSane)

zygote · 05-11-2013, 10:37 PM

Humorous priest section from genocide, although the penance of "couple hail mary's" was funny for the crimes of natural - murder etc. When reading the first line of Genocides first paragraph, thought the twist was going to be the priest was possessed/incarnation of satan that would have been an interesting direction. Perhaps, though this was better without that - more focused and conceptually clear. Thought the language from Natural was stronger than Endsanes in the two comparable sections. Endsane had better rhyme schemes, but the bluntness/directness of Natural created a strong writing.

05-11-2013, 10:37 PM	#6
zygote Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 501 Battle Record: 33-12 Accomplishments - OM HOF (2x) Champed - Art of Writing League (3x) Rep Power: 737828	Humorous priest section from genocide, although the penance of "couple hail mary's" was funny for the crimes of natural - murder etc. When reading the first line of Genocides first paragraph, thought the twist was going to be the priest was possessed/incarnation of satan that would have been an interesting direction. Perhaps, though this was better without that - more focused and conceptually clear. Thought the language from Natural was stronger than Endsanes in the two comparable sections. Endsane had better rhyme schemes, but the bluntness/directness of Natural created a strong writing.