Week 3: The Law vs. Breathless (BREATHLESS WINS 6-5)

Pharaohs Army · 03-21-2016, 12:51 PM

both verses here show some flashes and some potential, but also leave a lot to be desired.

mvgt Breathless
mainly because his verse created some intrigue and emotion

The Law can rhyme, but needs to first focus on clarity&message.

I'm hardly ever "mean" with my (serious)feedback... perhaps that's why I'm keeping this vote brief.
A shame because I see that both writers here have talent.
Both of you have the ability to bring a better game next time

03-21-2016, 12:51 PM	#8
Pharaohs Army Banned Join Date: Aug 2014 Posts: 2,956 Battle Record: 6 - 14 Rep Power: 0	both verses here show some flashes and some potential, but also leave a lot to be desired. mvgt Breathless mainly because his verse created some intrigue and emotion The Law can rhyme, but needs to first focus on clarity&message. I'm hardly ever "mean" with my (serious)feedback... perhaps that's why I'm keeping this vote brief. A shame because I see that both writers here have talent. Both of you have the ability to bring a better game next time