Week 2: Alice White vs. Just Write (JUST WRITE WINS BY NO-SHOW)

asylum · 03-08-2016, 01:43 AM

Season 6

Verses are due SATURDAY 3/12
Midnight Western / 3 AM Eastern / 8 AM UK.

Voting ends MONDAY 3/14
Midnight Western / 3 AM Eastern / 8 AM UK.

32 LINE MINIMUM

Verses may not exceed 48 lines

Voting on four battles is required. If you win and don't vote the requirement you will receive a loss instead. If you lose and don't vote the requirement, you will receive a one-week suspension. Please post links to your four votes in the voting thread.

Topic: You'll Never Miss The Water

Good luck to both participants. @Just Write (1-0) @Alice White (1-0)

Alice White · 03-08-2016, 03:53 PM

check

didn't have time to start writing yet, will probably post right before the deadline (UK time) @Just Write

Just Write · 03-12-2016, 07:59 PM

Is this due 9pm pacific?!?! I don't get off work for a few hours dude, not sure if I'm gunna make it but I'll try my best @asylum @Alice White

Alice White · 03-12-2016, 08:57 PM

I'd like to request an extension if possible @asylum @Just Write

Just Write · 03-12-2016, 09:04 PM

This story is about Kevin, and his impressionable stage
Not yet exposed to life's mentions of aggression or rage
see Adolescent brains develop, only how you mold them
And so far Kevin's was golden... the first to say please, or hold a door open
his mother had him young, and couldn't deal with the pressure
She argued with her parents and the bombarding reals of their lectures
" Baby one day you might regret your actions" concealing their stress
So instead of her giving him up they appealed with a gesture.
They said that they would raise him, love him, as their very own child
Her tears filled her face as she paced... she could barely smile
Still to this day, the court papers lay in their safe in a pile
See Kevin was a product of rape... & the case had never made it to trial..

But life goes on, now 11...

Kevin only knew his grandfather as good ol' friendly dad
And his character reflected from the memories they had
Every Wednesday they would sit in their boat on the lake
though they wouldn't go very far( Kevin couldn't row very straight)
But his "father" would encourage him every step of the way
And Kevin grew stronger with each lesson he gave
They'd fish for hour, surrounded by endless tops of pines
And he taught him patience with every toss of the line.
It often suprised grandfather how much Kevin resembled his daughter
how they both would chatter their teeth when cold; trembling in water
And they both loved to sit in the bow, simply soaking up some rays
...these are the memories his grandfather hoped would never fade

Another day...

He's 16 now, dad got him a car, just in time to drive
And he starts a job at the movies working nine to five
Now he hardly has time to spend at the lake with his pops
Too busy chasing the dames, parties with keggers & schnapps
it's not that dad's lame, in Kevin's mind, he'll just always be there
And At least he call's if he's late, that's a quality that's rare.
Such somber despair, as his father would sit waiting up by the door
Just wishing to go fishing with his growing son he adored
Broken promises recieved, followed by "I'm sorry, next week"
(We're all guilty of making them, yet most... we hardly ever keep)
The harsh reality is teens don't appreciate what they have until it's gone
And Kevin never thought his pops would have to battle passing on

At last

Kevin's grown now, has a family, & has fathered kids of his own
He moved to the city to get big, but times are harder than you know
His department laid him off so he said " a vacation was in need"
packed his family in his van and set the radio to station three
As Kevin drove up the street memories came, flooding his mind
And he felt peace overcome him in his most troubling times
As he pulled up to the house that set on the lakes farthest edge
He went for a walk to reminisce about all the things his father said
around the bend he visited his parents where they still lay in the ground
And tears steam down his face just wishing they were still around
This was the moment Kevin realized he didn't miss the lake or the water
He just wanted to sit once again rowing in that boat with his father

Just Write · 03-12-2016, 10:56 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Alice White

I'd like to request an extension if possible @asylum @Just Write

I wrote my verse in less that and hour, I think you can manage as well.. not to be a dick but I'm not one to give extentions.. I don't ask for them either, it usually leads to inadequate rushed votes because it's been posted late, hope I don't sound like too much of a douche and I hope you understand. @asylum you can delete all the excess posts in this thread if you don't mind

Alice White · 03-13-2016, 12:05 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Just Write

I wrote my verse in less that and hour, I think you can manage as well.. not to be a dick but I'm not one to give extentions.. I don't ask for them either, it usually leads to inadequate rushed votes because it's been posted late, hope I don't sound like too much of a douche and I hope you understand. @asylum you can delete all the excess posts in this thread if you don't mind

I had an emergency at work last night, that's why I asked for an extension. I get your point, though. It wouldn't be fair since you dropped on time, although @asylum granted me an extension. It's cool if you don't accept it. I'm usually not the one to no show, sorry about that. I'll make sure to at least leave some proper feed on this.

Just Write · 03-13-2016, 12:34 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Alice White

I had an emergency at work last night, that's why I asked for an extension. I get your point, though. It wouldn't be fair since you dropped on time, although @asylum granted me an extension. It's cool if you don't accept it. I'm usually not the one to no show, sorry about that. I'll make sure to at least leave some proper feed on this.

Lol for the most part I was just encouraging you to write, I have absolutely no problem with giving you the extwntion... especially if you had a emergency..., extention happily granted

Just Write · 03-14-2016, 12:53 PM

@Alice White where you at?

Alice White · 03-14-2016, 01:10 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Just Write

Lol for the most part I was just encouraging you to write, I have absolutely no problem with giving you the extwntion... especially if you had a emergency..., extention happily granted

Just saw this now..
Oh well! I'm past the deadline now, guess I'm not allowed to drop anymore, now am I?

sral · 03-14-2016, 01:28 PM

just post if you have your shit ready

if you don't take your L you've had more than enough time

smh

Just Write · 03-14-2016, 02:05 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Alice White

Just saw this now..
Oh well! I'm past the deadline now, guess I'm not allowed to drop anymore, now am I?

Yes you can.. it's alright with me.. unless you never had anything anyways

Razah · 03-14-2016, 02:33 PM

womp womp.

03-08-2016, 01:43 AM	#1
asylum Senior Member Join Date: Sep 2014 Posts: 993 Battle Record: 7-5 Rep Power: 8214208	Week 2: Alice White vs. Just Write (JUST WRITE WINS BY NO-SHOW) Season 6 Verses are due SATURDAY 3/12 Midnight Western / 3 AM Eastern / 8 AM UK. Voting ends MONDAY 3/14 Midnight Western / 3 AM Eastern / 8 AM UK. 32 LINE MINIMUM Verses may not exceed 48 lines Voting on four battles is required. If you win and don't vote the requirement you will receive a loss instead. If you lose and don't vote the requirement, you will receive a one-week suspension. Please post links to your four votes in the voting thread. Topic: You'll Never Miss The Water Good luck to both participants. @Just Write (1-0) @Alice White (1-0) Last edited by asylum; 03-14-2016 at 05:50 PM.

03-08-2016, 03:53 PM	#2
Alice White Member Join Date: Dec 2015 Posts: 72 Rep Power: 0	check didn't have time to start writing yet, will probably post right before the deadline (UK time) @Just Write __________________ https://theprincesstroll.wordpress.com Last edited by Alice White; 03-12-2016 at 02:58 PM.

03-12-2016, 07:59 PM	#3
Just Write Senior Member Join Date: Mar 2013 Posts: 1,709 Battle Record: 9-12 Rep Power: 4997614	Is this due 9pm pacific?!?! I don't get off work for a few hours dude, not sure if I'm gunna make it but I'll try my best @asylum @Alice White __________________

03-12-2016, 08:57 PM	#4
Alice White Member Join Date: Dec 2015 Posts: 72 Rep Power: 0	I'd like to request an extension if possible @asylum @Just Write __________________ https://theprincesstroll.wordpress.com

03-12-2016, 09:04 PM	#5
Just Write Senior Member Join Date: Mar 2013 Posts: 1,709 Battle Record: 9-12 Rep Power: 4997614	This story is about Kevin, and his impressionable stage Not yet exposed to life's mentions of aggression or rage see Adolescent brains develop, only how you mold them And so far Kevin's was golden... the first to say please, or hold a door open his mother had him young, and couldn't deal with the pressure She argued with her parents and the bombarding reals of their lectures " Baby one day you might regret your actions" concealing their stress So instead of her giving him up they appealed with a gesture. They said that they would raise him, love him, as their very own child Her tears filled her face as she paced... she could barely smile Still to this day, the court papers lay in their safe in a pile See Kevin was a product of rape... & the case had never made it to trial.. But life goes on, now 11... Kevin only knew his grandfather as good ol' friendly dad And his character reflected from the memories they had Every Wednesday they would sit in their boat on the lake though they wouldn't go very far( Kevin couldn't row very straight) But his "father" would encourage him every step of the way And Kevin grew stronger with each lesson he gave They'd fish for hour, surrounded by endless tops of pines And he taught him patience with every toss of the line. It often suprised grandfather how much Kevin resembled his daughter how they both would chatter their teeth when cold; trembling in water And they both loved to sit in the bow, simply soaking up some rays ...these are the memories his grandfather hoped would never fade Another day... He's 16 now, dad got him a car, just in time to drive And he starts a job at the movies working nine to five Now he hardly has time to spend at the lake with his pops Too busy chasing the dames, parties with keggers & schnapps it's not that dad's lame, in Kevin's mind, he'll just always be there And At least he call's if he's late, that's a quality that's rare. Such somber despair, as his father would sit waiting up by the door Just wishing to go fishing with his growing son he adored Broken promises recieved, followed by "I'm sorry, next week" (We're all guilty of making them, yet most... we hardly ever keep) The harsh reality is teens don't appreciate what they have until it's gone And Kevin never thought his pops would have to battle passing on At last Kevin's grown now, has a family, & has fathered kids of his own He moved to the city to get big, but times are harder than you know His department laid him off so he said " a vacation was in need" packed his family in his van and set the radio to station three As Kevin drove up the street memories came, flooding his mind And he felt peace overcome him in his most troubling times As he pulled up to the house that set on the lakes farthest edge He went for a walk to reminisce about all the things his father said around the bend he visited his parents where they still lay in the ground And tears steam down his face just wishing they were still around This was the moment Kevin realized he didn't miss the lake or the water He just wanted to sit once again rowing in that boat with his father __________________ Last edited by Just Write; 03-12-2016 at 10:53 PM. Reason: duh, to drop my verse

03-14-2016, 12:53 PM	#9
Just Write Senior Member Join Date: Mar 2013 Posts: 1,709 Battle Record: 9-12 Rep Power: 4997614	@Alice White where you at? __________________

03-14-2016, 01:28 PM	#11
sral Shrewd as evearthed Join Date: Aug 2014 Location: Wolverhampton, England Posts: 8,274 Battle Record: 28-3 Champed - Gimmick Battle League - The Winter Topical - Topical Martyrs - Lime Green Poetry Association - Lyric Olympics - Art of Writing League - Guerrilla Writing League (2x) - Black August II Rep Power: 85899392	just post if you have your shit ready if you don't take your L you've had more than enough time smh __________________ - Netcees Rebuttal Tourney - Art of Writing League (x 4) - AOWL Season 11 Champion (Undefeated Season)

03-14-2016, 02:33 PM	#13
Razah rockkFresh Join Date: Apr 2015 Location: Chicago. Posts: 1,088 Battle Record: 8-10 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 11328542	womp womp.