Week 2: Godcomplex vs. Razah (RAZAH WINS 7-3)

MMLP · 03-14-2016, 06:24 AM

GC- One thing that stood out on first read was how well you rhymed and it read smoothly (I usually struggle to get yours at first tbh). Took a second read to absorb and its quite an intriguing tale. seeing it from a ghosts (seemingly humanised) point of view was a cool conceptual twist on ‘sweet potato pie’.

Raz – quite a simple take on the topic in my eyes. It read smoothly (apart from nutritious/ delicious), not much wrong with it. Stuck to topic well throughout. Loved the ‘I’m always ready for seconds’ line.
Whatever happened to you name dropping your opponents in verses?! Good job!

I give GC the edge here, storytelling over a longer period was the main factor here!

03-14-2016, 06:24 AM	#5
MMLP Senior Member Join Date: Mar 2013 Posts: 614 Battle Record: 15-16 Champed - Write Week 9 Rep Power: 9768091	GC- One thing that stood out on first read was how well you rhymed and it read smoothly (I usually struggle to get yours at first tbh). Took a second read to absorb and its quite an intriguing tale. seeing it from a ghosts (seemingly humanised) point of view was a cool conceptual twist on ‘sweet potato pie’. Raz – quite a simple take on the topic in my eyes. It read smoothly (apart from nutritious/ delicious), not much wrong with it. Stuck to topic well throughout. Loved the ‘I’m always ready for seconds’ line. Whatever happened to you name dropping your opponents in verses?! Good job! I give GC the edge here, storytelling over a longer period was the main factor here!