Week 2: Timeless vs. Asylum (TIMELESS WINS SHUTOUT 7-0)

breathless · 03-14-2016, 06:19 AM

Vote - timeless

Timeless - the piece was near perfect, consistent, complex unorthodox multistage that weren't forced have for an smooth read despite all that was going on. Great story, easy to jump into the narrator girl's head and visualize the story. At times it became a bit to adjective laden, but it worked still

Asylum - great piece, I wasn't entirely sure what time setting I was supposed to imagine until about half way through, but after rereading it does come through a bit. More wordplay heavy than rhyme scheme, and at times some of the lines were a little stretchy. Great piece as usual but could have been epic with some more polishing

03-14-2016, 06:19 AM	#1
breathless Master of Beastiality Join Date: Sep 2013 Location: Lansing, Mi Posts: 368 Battle Record: 4-6 Rep Power: 0	Vote - timeless Timeless - the piece was near perfect, consistent, complex unorthodox multistage that weren't forced have for an smooth read despite all that was going on. Great story, easy to jump into the narrator girl's head and visualize the story. At times it became a bit to adjective laden, but it worked still Asylum - great piece, I wasn't entirely sure what time setting I was supposed to imagine until about half way through, but after rereading it does come through a bit. More wordplay heavy than rhyme scheme, and at times some of the lines were a little stretchy. Great piece as usual but could have been epic with some more polishing __________________ I used to be amazing... http://soundcloud.com/dancourser/sets