03-08-2016, 01:43 AM | #1 |
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Week 2: Alice White vs. Just Write (JUST WRITE WINS BY NO-SHOW)
Season 6 Verses are due SATURDAY 3/12 Midnight Western / 3 AM Eastern / 8 AM UK. Voting ends MONDAY 3/14 Midnight Western / 3 AM Eastern / 8 AM UK. 32 LINE MINIMUM Verses may not exceed 48 lines Voting on four battles is required. If you win and don't vote the requirement you will receive a loss instead. If you lose and don't vote the requirement, you will receive a one-week suspension. Please post links to your four votes in the voting thread. Topic: You'll Never Miss The Water Good luck to both participants. @Just Write (1-0) @Alice White (1-0) Last edited by asylum; 03-14-2016 at 05:50 PM. |
03-08-2016, 03:53 PM | #2 |
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didn't have time to start writing yet, will probably post right before the deadline (UK time) @Just Write
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Is this due 9pm pacific?!?! I don't get off work for a few hours dude, not sure if I'm gunna make it but I'll try my best @asylum @Alice White
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I'd like to request an extension if possible @asylum @Just Write
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03-12-2016, 09:04 PM | #5 |
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This story is about Kevin, and his impressionable stage
Not yet exposed to life's mentions of aggression or rage see Adolescent brains develop, only how you mold them And so far Kevin's was golden... the first to say please, or hold a door open his mother had him young, and couldn't deal with the pressure She argued with her parents and the bombarding reals of their lectures " Baby one day you might regret your actions" concealing their stress So instead of her giving him up they appealed with a gesture. They said that they would raise him, love him, as their very own child Her tears filled her face as she paced... she could barely smile Still to this day, the court papers lay in their safe in a pile See Kevin was a product of rape... & the case had never made it to trial.. But life goes on, now 11... Kevin only knew his grandfather as good ol' friendly dad And his character reflected from the memories they had Every Wednesday they would sit in their boat on the lake though they wouldn't go very far( Kevin couldn't row very straight) But his "father" would encourage him every step of the way And Kevin grew stronger with each lesson he gave They'd fish for hour, surrounded by endless tops of pines And he taught him patience with every toss of the line. It often suprised grandfather how much Kevin resembled his daughter how they both would chatter their teeth when cold; trembling in water And they both loved to sit in the bow, simply soaking up some rays ...these are the memories his grandfather hoped would never fade Another day... He's 16 now, dad got him a car, just in time to drive And he starts a job at the movies working nine to five Now he hardly has time to spend at the lake with his pops Too busy chasing the dames, parties with keggers & schnapps it's not that dad's lame, in Kevin's mind, he'll just always be there And At least he call's if he's late, that's a quality that's rare. Such somber despair, as his father would sit waiting up by the door Just wishing to go fishing with his growing son he adored Broken promises recieved, followed by "I'm sorry, next week" (We're all guilty of making them, yet most... we hardly ever keep) The harsh reality is teens don't appreciate what they have until it's gone And Kevin never thought his pops would have to battle passing on At last Kevin's grown now, has a family, & has fathered kids of his own He moved to the city to get big, but times are harder than you know His department laid him off so he said " a vacation was in need" packed his family in his van and set the radio to station three As Kevin drove up the street memories came, flooding his mind And he felt peace overcome him in his most troubling times As he pulled up to the house that set on the lakes farthest edge He went for a walk to reminisce about all the things his father said around the bend he visited his parents where they still lay in the ground And tears steam down his face just wishing they were still around This was the moment Kevin realized he didn't miss the lake or the water He just wanted to sit once again rowing in that boat with his father
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@Alice White where you at?
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Oh well! I'm past the deadline now, guess I'm not allowed to drop anymore, now am I?
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just post if you have your shit ready
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Yes you can.. it's alright with me.. unless you never had anything anyways
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