A Twisted Fate

Alice White · 03-11-2016, 12:15 PM

Scheme-wise, this was intriguing. I really liked your switch ups and rhyming patterns, along with a quite nice usage of multis. Now content-wise, this was quite different from what I've seen from you so far! I really appreciate the strikingly poetic tone and subtle abstractness behind some of the lines. Some of the lit. elements you employed really helped painting a vivid picture,

mere mortal
the pot can see what the kettle looks like

your emotions and "subtle" anger were conveyed very nicely.

you feast with your demons while I struggle to feed mine

Thought this line stood really out with a nice contrast, a rather common comparison but your approach was original, imo.

Overall, an enjoyable read!

03-11-2016, 12:15 PM	#2
Alice White Member Join Date: Dec 2015 Posts: 72 Rep Power: 0	Scheme-wise, this was intriguing. I really liked your switch ups and rhyming patterns, along with a quite nice usage of multis. Now content-wise, this was quite different from what I've seen from you so far! I really appreciate the strikingly poetic tone and subtle abstractness behind some of the lines. Some of the lit. elements you employed really helped painting a vivid picture, mere mortal the pot can see what the kettle looks like your emotions and "subtle" anger were conveyed very nicely. you feast with your demons while I struggle to feed mine Thought this line stood really out with a nice contrast, a rather common comparison but your approach was original, imo. Overall, an enjoyable read! __________________ https://theprincesstroll.wordpress.com