Addiction =/= self loathing (Short poem)

slech · 02-08-2016, 04:39 PM

I love the one I hate the most,
shove emotions back and forth.
--I personally have gone through this. This speaks a lot to me. I like the beginning to this---
Haunting past a different ghost,
sip a drink, then have a toast.
--Didn't really like how you executing that last line. I was looking for something else but it's still decent'''

It's not my first, and not my last,
shifting through this mound of grass.
Life is long but not so vast,
why am I the one to last?
---OK, Suicidal thoughts? Or just lonely? Overall, I like the visualization I have with this--

Twitching, bitching, lots of itching,
missing kissing? Wishful thinking...
Hissing, drizzling, fill the cup,
kill the feeling: bottoms up!
--Ok, this was fairly nice, not sure IF I enjoyed the bottoms up finisher but over all, I like what you did here--
I didn't like the 'missing kissing' though

02-08-2016, 04:39 PM	#14
slech > Join Date: Nov 2015 Posts: 150 Battle Record: 1-3 Rep Power: 3807832	I love the one I hate the most, shove emotions back and forth. --I personally have gone through this. This speaks a lot to me. I like the beginning to this--- Haunting past a different ghost, sip a drink, then have a toast. --Didn't really like how you executing that last line. I was looking for something else but it's still decent''' It's not my first, and not my last, shifting through this mound of grass. Life is long but not so vast, why am I the one to last? ---OK, Suicidal thoughts? Or just lonely? Overall, I like the visualization I have with this-- Twitching, bitching, lots of itching, missing kissing? Wishful thinking... Hissing, drizzling, fill the cup, kill the feeling: bottoms up! --Ok, this was fairly nice, not sure IF I enjoyed the bottoms up finisher but over all, I like what you did here-- I didn't like the 'missing kissing' though