Round One: GodComplex vs. Slecht [OPEN FOR VOTES]

Argh · 01-13-2016, 12:00 AM

slecht
I like that you brought something different to the table. Your verse suffered from brevity though, and I wish you had spent more time fleshing out the concept. The sentiment was there (especially at the end), but the rhyme scheme was weak and more appropriate for a poetry verse.

Godcomplex
Have you written under another moniker? Your style seems familiar. While your content was a bit esoteric for my personal taste, it was well executed. The opening couplet was pure butter and there were some great descriptive passages throughout. The "sewer, dirt" and "nuclear/nucleus" rhymes were my only pain points.

Vote
Godcomplex took this one pretty handedly with the more developed and innovative verse. His piece made me pause and imagine, which is always a good thing.

VOTE = Godcomplex

- B.

01-13-2016, 12:00 AM	#11
Argh Member Join Date: Dec 2015 Posts: 34 Rep Power: 3436004	slecht I like that you brought something different to the table. Your verse suffered from brevity though, and I wish you had spent more time fleshing out the concept. The sentiment was there (especially at the end), but the rhyme scheme was weak and more appropriate for a poetry verse. Godcomplex Have you written under another moniker? Your style seems familiar. While your content was a bit esoteric for my personal taste, it was well executed. The opening couplet was pure butter and there were some great descriptive passages throughout. The "sewer, dirt" and "nuclear/nucleus" rhymes were my only pain points. Vote Godcomplex took this one pretty handedly with the more developed and innovative verse. His piece made me pause and imagine, which is always a good thing. VOTE = Godcomplex - B. Last edited by Argh; 01-13-2016 at 12:13 AM.