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Just Write · 05-07-2013, 04:19 PM

my ninja, what the fuck was that? while i think its a beautiful collection of words intertwined superbly some of the shit you write just goes over the top of me so i had a hard time feeding it.

you're more to me than the court dates.corny theatrics.forty-something, pity pageant,grinning bastard courting assestits and city subway passesyou're forcefully absent. alive in your hearthburning bark. Red-eye faucet, groggy water weight,dihydrogen oxygen dearth: forgotten in Dasani crate...American-made father figure, escaped abroad to get his mistress made.

i enjoyed this portion and the latter of the piece. ill definitely keep reading your shit i just want to see a more concentrated piece that isnt so abstract.. stay up

05-07-2013, 04:19 PM	#5
Just Write Senior Member Join Date: Mar 2013 Posts: 1,709 Battle Record: 9-12 Rep Power: 4997617	my ninja, what the fuck was that? while i think its a beautiful collection of words intertwined superbly some of the shit you write just goes over the top of me so i had a hard time feeding it. you're more to me than the court dates.corny theatrics.forty-something, pity pageant,grinning bastard courting assestits and city subway passesyou're forcefully absent. alive in your hearthburning bark. Red-eye faucet, groggy water weight,dihydrogen oxygen dearth: forgotten in Dasani crate...American-made father figure, escaped abroad to get his mistress made. i enjoyed this portion and the latter of the piece. ill definitely keep reading your shit i just want to see a more concentrated piece that isnt so abstract.. stay up __________________