Round dos Vividlyvague vs. Nigma - VIVIDLY VAGUE WINS

MMLP · 11-30-2015, 03:48 PM

VV – It’s hard to story build with so much quoting and not have it (pace of a story) be disrupted imho. I’m saying this as I can see a lot of it before I read.

The start is brilliant, really has set a premise for something potentially special. Less quoting in this (part) and more story building so for my personal preference, thanks lol. Rhyme structure wise, it’s the best ive seen of u.

The scariest part was not knowing why they were fighting with us. - sick, very profound.

the two stanzas before the picture is ace, story building wise. I’m genuinely intrigued at this point, very interesting. Rhyming is almost flawless.

Wow! Awesome finish, a fantastic message you’ve put across with the use of an alien army haha! You’ve proved me wrong, the quoting works in all of this! This is the best piece you’ve written VV (well that ive seen of you anyway).
This will be hard to top!

Nigma-I like the concept, it’s a little too muddled and hard to grasp at first I think. But I love a challenging read and this is no exception. Whilst the subtlety kinda dies half way through, it still leaves me wondering exactly who this ‘girl’ is and her origins which in turn was more than enough to keep me hooked. A very sweet outcome, dope throughout imo. Imagery was top class!!!! Technically it was sound. it’s worded slightly better overall than VV’s I think. Loved reading it back.

“saw my mother dodging sniper shots while hanging laundry” - DOPE LINE
“had the prophet-like logic of seers
they'd often appear just to rob him
and sheer the opulent wisdom given by a vision beyond the sockets experience
he was often delirious. product of ominous knowledge, bombings, and pyramids” - CRAZY FLOW!

Great job!

Both pieces would win 9/10 against the average NC verse imo NO DOUBT! Top quality match up!
Fook…………… I might put your two names in a hat and one pick out lol. This is hardest vote I’ve ever had on this site! Dunno why im stressing so much

90946115839205 mins later!

mvgt/ Vivid... slightly better ending!!!

I hope we do a mag soon so I talk up this battle

11-30-2015, 03:48 PM	#1
MMLP Senior Member Join Date: Mar 2013 Posts: 614 Battle Record: 15-16 Champed - Write Week 9 Rep Power: 9768091	VV – It’s hard to story build with so much quoting and not have it (pace of a story) be disrupted imho. I’m saying this as I can see a lot of it before I read. The start is brilliant, really has set a premise for something potentially special. Less quoting in this (part) and more story building so for my personal preference, thanks lol. Rhyme structure wise, it’s the best ive seen of u. The scariest part was not knowing why they were fighting with us. - sick, very profound. the two stanzas before the picture is ace, story building wise. I’m genuinely intrigued at this point, very interesting. Rhyming is almost flawless. Wow! Awesome finish, a fantastic message you’ve put across with the use of an alien army haha! You’ve proved me wrong, the quoting works in all of this! This is the best piece you’ve written VV (well that ive seen of you anyway). This will be hard to top! Nigma-I like the concept, it’s a little too muddled and hard to grasp at first I think. But I love a challenging read and this is no exception. Whilst the subtlety kinda dies half way through, it still leaves me wondering exactly who this ‘girl’ is and her origins which in turn was more than enough to keep me hooked. A very sweet outcome, dope throughout imo. Imagery was top class!!!! Technically it was sound. it’s worded slightly better overall than VV’s I think. Loved reading it back. “saw my mother dodging sniper shots while hanging laundry” - DOPE LINE “had the prophet-like logic of seers they'd often appear just to rob him and sheer the opulent wisdom given by a vision beyond the sockets experience he was often delirious. product of ominous knowledge, bombings, and pyramids” - CRAZY FLOW! Great job! Both pieces would win 9/10 against the average NC verse imo NO DOUBT! Top quality match up! Fook…………… I might put your two names in a hat and one pick out lol. This is hardest vote I’ve ever had on this site! Dunno why im stressing so much 90946115839205 mins later! mvgt/ Vivid... slightly better ending!!! I hope we do a mag soon so I talk up this battle