AOWL WK11: Mike Wrecka (5-5) VS. Objective (3-3) [MIKE WRECKA WINS, 5-4.]

Zen · 05-06-2013, 01:36 PM

Objective: Nice piece. I think really it might be the best piece I've ever read from you. The first part of the piece was definatly the strongest portion. Good story being carried along quickly by good rhymes. The negatives of your verse is I didn't feel as Adonis said earlier a Wow factor. It was just kinda a story that rhymed to me. No offense of course but that's how I felt. But all in all a good verse man.
Mike Wrecka: Good verse here. It's a rant about human nature and if you know me then you know that I love a good ole fashioned rant. But really this was a good verse although some lines had a few too many syllables and it fucked up the reading but aside from that I don't really see any negative to this. Nice short verse with a good meaning and good message.

Overall I got Mike Wrecka.

05-06-2013, 01:36 PM	#12
Zen Arm the Homeless Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,102 Battle Record: 22-24 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 35079722	Objective: Nice piece. I think really it might be the best piece I've ever read from you. The first part of the piece was definatly the strongest portion. Good story being carried along quickly by good rhymes. The negatives of your verse is I didn't feel as Adonis said earlier a Wow factor. It was just kinda a story that rhymed to me. No offense of course but that's how I felt. But all in all a good verse man. Mike Wrecka: Good verse here. It's a rant about human nature and if you know me then you know that I love a good ole fashioned rant. But really this was a good verse although some lines had a few too many syllables and it fucked up the reading but aside from that I don't really see any negative to this. Nice short verse with a good meaning and good message. Overall I got Mike Wrecka.