warning track

Objective · 05-06-2013, 10:59 AM

Interesting piece, took me a couple reads to kinda understand what you were saying. The title is Warning Track and how it correlates with the shit you're saying can probably be understood differently depending on the reader. You're talking about lack of sanity and growing old and heros changing towards the end and older works/prior poets earlier and started it all off where you see yourself as a writer. Are you talking about a theory you have that we're all slowly losing it overall because we're clinging to what used to be good rather than looking at what we have today and take it on ourselves try to surpass older works with lesser quality? I don't know, I might have lost the point completely as well, feel free to elaborate tho'.

Either way I enjoyed the lucid ghost line along with a couple others. Beside of that some of the points seemed kinda cryptic and scattered around rather than giving a straight forward clarification on the shit you were saying, which is cool cuz it makes me think about what you were saying but I ended up more puzzled rather than getting some of the lines. Might be because I'm stupid as fuck right now or just overall tired from the weekend, but whatevs, it is what it is.

When it comes down to it it's a pretty cool piece with lots to say in a verse that seemed to be experimental in terms of flow/set-ups etc. The flow had minor hiccups here and there but nothing noteworthy as far as I'm concerned. Keep it up.

05-06-2013, 10:59 AM	#2
Objective ( ͡º ͜ʖ ͡º) Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 3,868 Battle Record: 17-32 Rep Power: 52474192	Interesting piece, took me a couple reads to kinda understand what you were saying. The title is Warning Track and how it correlates with the shit you're saying can probably be understood differently depending on the reader. You're talking about lack of sanity and growing old and heros changing towards the end and older works/prior poets earlier and started it all off where you see yourself as a writer. Are you talking about a theory you have that we're all slowly losing it overall because we're clinging to what used to be good rather than looking at what we have today and take it on ourselves try to surpass older works with lesser quality? I don't know, I might have lost the point completely as well, feel free to elaborate tho'. Either way I enjoyed the lucid ghost line along with a couple others. Beside of that some of the points seemed kinda cryptic and scattered around rather than giving a straight forward clarification on the shit you were saying, which is cool cuz it makes me think about what you were saying but I ended up more puzzled rather than getting some of the lines. Might be because I'm stupid as fuck right now or just overall tired from the weekend, but whatevs, it is what it is. When it comes down to it it's a pretty cool piece with lots to say in a verse that seemed to be experimental in terms of flow/set-ups etc. The flow had minor hiccups here and there but nothing noteworthy as far as I'm concerned. Keep it up.