Week 15: (9-4) Godcomplex vs. (8-4) Mr. J - GC 5-0

e11even · 11-05-2015, 09:47 PM

Godcomplex- Very interesting piece here. I fell deep into this story and your numerous descriptions throughout. Your vocabulary seems pretty damn decent, but the flow was a lil unorthodox for me in parts. The rhyming was a little jumpy and seemed unorganized. My guess is it wasn't the focus, or maybe you substituted words that sounded better aesthetically, but not vocally. Overall good job bro.

mr.j- you should have finished this. with your concrete rhyme schemes and solid approach, this could have contended nicely, but fell short due to lack of effort. I think i would've like where this was going, but I guess I'll never know. Thanks for at least showing though.

Here we have complete and good versus incomplete with potential. I believe if J's heart was in it he could have put numbers on the board, but in this case MVGT Godcomplex. Thank you both for showing.

11-05-2015, 09:47 PM	#7
e11even V.V Join Date: Sep 2013 Location: . Posts: 2,076 Battle Record: 31-20 Rep Power: 6247259	Godcomplex- Very interesting piece here. I fell deep into this story and your numerous descriptions throughout. Your vocabulary seems pretty damn decent, but the flow was a lil unorthodox for me in parts. The rhyming was a little jumpy and seemed unorganized. My guess is it wasn't the focus, or maybe you substituted words that sounded better aesthetically, but not vocally. Overall good job bro. mr.j- you should have finished this. with your concrete rhyme schemes and solid approach, this could have contended nicely, but fell short due to lack of effort. I think i would've like where this was going, but I guess I'll never know. Thanks for at least showing though. Here we have complete and good versus incomplete with potential. I believe if J's heart was in it he could have put numbers on the board, but in this case MVGT Godcomplex. Thank you both for showing. __________________ Ahem.