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Old 11-05-2015, 08:24 AM   #3
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How does this have no votes yet?

Right, put simply, I enjoyed Copy's take on this more. It suited his more comedic and lighthearted approach over Jesodist's this week.

For wehat it's worth, I enjoyed the ending of Jeso's piece a lot more than I did the beginning with his syllable matching being off and almost feeling like he tried too hard to amke it something it wasn't. His flow tightened up a lot more towards the last 4-5 lines and it read wayyyyyyy smoother. I'm not saying i'm not a fan of his usual style, because I thought against 2triple0 he easily outclassed his opponent that week, but I do much prefer the style he had at the end of this. It's more natural, smoother, it "fits" him more even if it isn't as unique as the style we're used to reading from him.

This verse seemed scatterbrained, it lacked a real clear direction and that showed for me. It wasn't bad given its length, but it was far from his best work. The same can be said for Copy here, in truth, it was far from a polished performance and the entire line didnt rhyme like he usually opens up with LOL!

This was a cool contest, I just preferred Copy's take and execution, that's what the differences was here for me. The quality decided it. I enjoyed his idea and felt it flipped the topic the better of the two while matching if not exceeding his opponent in so far as mechanics/scheming and flow/originality.

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