GRUDGE MATCH: MMLP vs YDK - MMLP 4-1

asylum · 10-16-2015, 06:03 AM

mmlp - i like your description of the way of the universe and shit. i did a somewhat similar piece a while ago about black holes and i think yours was executed better. enjoyed the read. favorite lines..

all shifting in space and further apart
some distance away was the birth of a star

unearthing a spark that would break from the rest
was certain to start a chain of events

^felt that was your strongest point.

ydk - favorite lines..
It makes me question existence, existential conversations evolve,
Unlike ourselves within this minds of us all.
What is life? Is it breathing or hoping?
Is it finding a way to smile, or naturally coping?

your piece was a simple examination of existence and questioning one's place.
you connected with some questions and assertions i truly felt. dope piece, just wasn't developed to a standard i've come to expect from you. better luck next week.

/v mmlp this week came with a more developed piece that overall had better coherence, style, and flow. he took this pretty solid imho.

10-16-2015, 06:03 AM	#10
asylum Senior Member Join Date: Sep 2014 Posts: 999 Battle Record: 7-5 Rep Power: 8214211	mmlp - i like your description of the way of the universe and shit. i did a somewhat similar piece a while ago about black holes and i think yours was executed better. enjoyed the read. favorite lines.. all shifting in space and further apart some distance away was the birth of a star unearthing a spark that would break from the rest was certain to start a chain of events ^felt that was your strongest point. ydk - favorite lines.. It makes me question existence, existential conversations evolve, Unlike ourselves within this minds of us all. What is life? Is it breathing or hoping? Is it finding a way to smile, or naturally coping? your piece was a simple examination of existence and questioning one's place. you connected with some questions and assertions i truly felt. dope piece, just wasn't developed to a standard i've come to expect from you. better luck next week. /v mmlp this week came with a more developed piece that overall had better coherence, style, and flow. he took this pretty solid imho.