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10-12-2015, 02:44 PM
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The Clown Prince
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Im not a fan of having hooks in verses but cool whatever...
I thought that first verse showcased some cool transitioning it made for a smooth read because the flow is just rapid having that hook in there just kind of skewered the joy I felt from the start anyway I enjoyed what I did read, so good job buddy..
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