never let go

YDK · 04-15-2013, 03:34 AM

We live in a world
where sinning's the beginnin to winning the race
2 separate worlds
a collision of visions spark infinite fluctuations of time and space
I want that you want me
You got it don't taunt me
I'm feeling like feelings are just here to haunt me
Im losing my mind but choosing to find
That chewing the food for my thoughts
is ruining mine!
A penny for a thought
Nickles for a sentence
Quarters in my pocket
dimes in my presence.
Gold in my lungs
Coal on my tongue
Jay Z's on the radio
But I'm forever young.
Distorting the fortress I've built on my heart
Debating importance
where do I start?
I was 5 maybe 6
When I had my first kiss
she moved out of state and just left me wit this.
"That was fun yesterday when we played with our lips
But I don't think I love you"
Shit we were just kids!
But somehow that love story always replays
I give out my heart
And watch it decay.
We're in 2 different worlds
But when they collide
We will survive
And remain you and i.
Goodbye my memories
Until we meet again
I'll be waiting at this table with paper and pen.

YDK · 04-15-2013, 11:42 PM

Bump

http://www.netcees.co/showthread.php?t=6105

IamBenT · 04-16-2013, 03:56 PM

Fantastic, flow was on point, very rhymable if thats a word lol images were crisp and i liked the ending of how we are expecting one thing and booom we get hit with something else. The whole money metaphor was my favorite part, too. Dimes in my presence lol

YDK · 05-01-2013, 03:53 AM

Lol thanks man my bad I forgot I had posted this

Zen · 05-01-2013, 01:25 PM

Fuck man this was some pretty good shit. Nice flow. It had that kinda stutter step to it if that makes any sense lol. But also some nice quoteables in here.
Im losing my mind but choosing to find
That chewing the food for my thoughts
is ruining mine!
^^Definatly my favorite part of this. Nice.
All in all you got some good shit man. Keep droppin but remember to drop feed on other posts as well.

YDK · 05-01-2013, 07:54 PM

thanks man i dont got net at my house unless i'm on my baby mamas phone so i aint able to feed as much as i need lol i got you now tho

04-15-2013, 03:34 AM	#1
YDK ghost in the matrix Join Date: Apr 2013 Location: Covington, KY Posts: 4,564 Battle Record: 14-25 Champed - Art of Writing League (x2) - Lime Green Poetry Association Rep Power: 8181109	never let go We live in a world where sinning's the beginnin to winning the race 2 separate worlds a collision of visions spark infinite fluctuations of time and space I want that you want me You got it don't taunt me I'm feeling like feelings are just here to haunt me Im losing my mind but choosing to find That chewing the food for my thoughts is ruining mine! A penny for a thought Nickles for a sentence Quarters in my pocket dimes in my presence. Gold in my lungs Coal on my tongue Jay Z's on the radio But I'm forever young. Distorting the fortress I've built on my heart Debating importance where do I start? I was 5 maybe 6 When I had my first kiss she moved out of state and just left me wit this. "That was fun yesterday when we played with our lips But I don't think I love you" Shit we were just kids! But somehow that love story always replays I give out my heart And watch it decay. We're in 2 different worlds But when they collide We will survive And remain you and i. Goodbye my memories Until we meet again I'll be waiting at this table with paper and pen.

04-15-2013, 11:42 PM	#2
YDK ghost in the matrix Join Date: Apr 2013 Location: Covington, KY Posts: 4,564 Battle Record: 14-25 Champed - Art of Writing League (x2) - Lime Green Poetry Association Rep Power: 8181109	Bump http://www.netcees.co/showthread.php?t=6105 Last edited by YDK; 05-01-2013 at 07:56 PM.

04-16-2013, 03:56 PM	#3
IamBenT SuPreaM Lyricyst Join Date: Feb 2013 Location: San Antonio, TX Posts: 704 Battle Record: 9-6 Rep Power: 412355	Fantastic, flow was on point, very rhymable if thats a word lol images were crisp and i liked the ending of how we are expecting one thing and booom we get hit with something else. The whole money metaphor was my favorite part, too. Dimes in my presence lol __________________ *A.bove T.he R.est* IamBenT\|Genocide\|MikeWrecka\|Objective\|Vulgar\|Witty \|Rawn MacDon

05-01-2013, 03:53 AM	#4
YDK ghost in the matrix Join Date: Apr 2013 Location: Covington, KY Posts: 4,564 Battle Record: 14-25 Champed - Art of Writing League (x2) - Lime Green Poetry Association Rep Power: 8181109	Lol thanks man my bad I forgot I had posted this __________________

05-01-2013, 07:54 PM	#6
YDK ghost in the matrix Join Date: Apr 2013 Location: Covington, KY Posts: 4,564 Battle Record: 14-25 Champed - Art of Writing League (x2) - Lime Green Poetry Association Rep Power: 8181109	thanks man i dont got net at my house unless i'm on my baby mamas phone so i aint able to feed as much as i need lol i got you now tho __________________

05-01-2013, 01:25 PM	#5
Zen Arm the Homeless Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,104 Battle Record: 22-24 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 35079719	Fuck man this was some pretty good shit. Nice flow. It had that kinda stutter step to it if that makes any sense lol. But also some nice quoteables in here. Im losing my mind but choosing to find That chewing the food for my thoughts is ruining mine! ^^Definatly my favorite part of this. Nice. All in all you got some good shit man. Keep droppin but remember to drop feed on other posts as well.