YDK 0-2 vs. Work 0-2 - YDK WINS

Sn00p · 09-08-2015, 09:00 AM

ydk was decent. wording should've been better. things like using "put" two times in a bar throw me off when it's just one bar u have to write. and it didn't rly use the np to its full effect, becuz i kinda felt the punchline was more focused on the "only thing i put into u is embalming fluid" misdirection thing. but it was a decent bar.

work had similar problems. i have never gotten the seeds of a dandelion in my mouth, & not even as a kid. also, u could've used the blowing part for the wordplay as well, so it'd be a double tie-in. if u had done that, i would've voted for u 100%. as is, ur bar felt a bit lacking. pretty harsh tho, but i don't think that was enough here.

so yea, this was close as fuck. both had some wording issues, but in the end, i think ydk used his concept a bit better. props to both tho, this is one of the closest 1-2's i've ever seen.

v/ydk

SuckaFreeCashier · 09-08-2015, 09:20 AM

v/ YDK

I thought he got a lot more out of his setup and the punch was more creative / hit harder than works.

09-08-2015, 09:00 AM	#1
Sn00p General German Join Date: Dec 2009 Posts: 1,988 Battle Record: 26-12 Champed - Netcees Battle League (2x) - Line4Line Cypher Tourney - Back2Basics - Fight Night XLVI Rep Power: 15213753	ydk was decent. wording should've been better. things like using "put" two times in a bar throw me off when it's just one bar u have to write. and it didn't rly use the np to its full effect, becuz i kinda felt the punchline was more focused on the "only thing i put into u is embalming fluid" misdirection thing. but it was a decent bar. work had similar problems. i have never gotten the seeds of a dandelion in my mouth, & not even as a kid. also, u could've used the blowing part for the wordplay as well, so it'd be a double tie-in. if u had done that, i would've voted for u 100%. as is, ur bar felt a bit lacking. pretty harsh tho, but i don't think that was enough here. so yea, this was close as fuck. both had some wording issues, but in the end, i think ydk used his concept a bit better. props to both tho, this is one of the closest 1-2's i've ever seen. v/ydk

09-08-2015, 09:20 AM	#2
SuckaFreeCashier Senior Member Join Date: Aug 2015 Location: St Louis Posts: 102 Battle Record: 1-2 Rep Power: 185208	v/ YDK I thought he got a lot more out of his setup and the punch was more creative / hit harder than works.