I wonder aliens are watching us and the stars are for show

Geno · 04-29-2013, 09:14 PM

Not perfect as in flawless. Perfect as in it looks to be rehearsed

There’s no way in hell, the way you smell, is heaven. It’s transversed Cause once you came, you’d be here to stay. Was lonesome not coerced

Thought those line were fire
As I read on though, honestly.. it seemed like you dwindled olff lequickly. The content became low in quality to rapidly for me.. I think the part about repition was pretty dope, but felt you could have dropped more fire like those opening lines. You clearly have a good mind and a new way to display your thoughts in compariso to most writers here.. hopefully you'll stick around and elevate some more.

Keep active!

04-29-2013, 09:14 PM	#1
Geno White Earl Join Date: Jan 2013 Location: Philly Cat. Posts: 12,354 Battle Record: 10-15 Accomplishments - Open Mic HOF (4x) Champed - Netcees Writers League - Write Week I - Write Week 8 Rep Power: 50036761	Not perfect as in flawless. Perfect as in it looks to be rehearsed There’s no way in hell, the way you smell, is heaven. It’s transversed Cause once you came, you’d be here to stay. Was lonesome not coerced Thought those line were fire As I read on though, honestly.. it seemed like you dwindled olff lequickly. The content became low in quality to rapidly for me.. I think the part about repition was pretty dope, but felt you could have dropped more fire like those opening lines. You clearly have a good mind and a new way to display your thoughts in compariso to most writers here.. hopefully you'll stick around and elevate some more. Keep active! __________________ *-A.bove T.he R.est*