Week 5: YDK (0-0) vs. Zen (0-0) RAKONTUR 4-3

Inno · 08-20-2015, 09:16 PM

Both went for the literal. Expected but def not wasted.

Rak

This felt like a poem to me. Either the cadence or the how short
It was both in line and overall length. Either way this had a deep tone
To it. I want to say your ending "pretend your me" was almost predicted
By the tone of this piece. But it's predictable in a good way like " i hope it ends
How i think it will end" which tbh as a reader is pretty dope.

Ydk

I thought your verse was dope as fuck until that last line. You had this srs tone to
The piece and then suddenly that line seemed to undermine the rest of the verse
To get a cheap ending. Wasnt feeling that at all.

Vote

Rak

I thought his overall showing was much better than ydk, i feel like he dropped
The ball with the computer history end.

08-20-2015, 09:16 PM	#8
Inno Ad mini tator Join Date: Feb 2013 Posts: 10,025 Battle Record: 26-54 Champed - Lime Green Poetry Association - Black August - 1-2 Punch League Rep Power: 85899403	Both went for the literal. Expected but def not wasted. Rak This felt like a poem to me. Either the cadence or the how short It was both in line and overall length. Either way this had a deep tone To it. I want to say your ending "pretend your me" was almost predicted By the tone of this piece. But it's predictable in a good way like " i hope it ends How i think it will end" which tbh as a reader is pretty dope. Ydk I thought your verse was dope as fuck until that last line. You had this srs tone to The piece and then suddenly that line seemed to undermine the rest of the verse To get a cheap ending. Wasnt feeling that at all. Vote Rak I thought his overall showing was much better than ydk, i feel like he dropped The ball with the computer history end.