Week 5: YDK (0-0) vs. Zen (0-0) RAKONTUR 4-3

Razah · 08-18-2015, 03:16 PM

So, Im'a just quote the shit I didn't like.

"Leaving a lifeless being more crispy wing.
Kentucky fried while alive, rendered cheap"

That couplet ruined the piece for me.

YDK:

"Because I still have to clear my computers history."

I thought that was funny, but, it didn't fit well. Should've just stayed serious if ya' ask me.

I liked Rakontur's verse more. The wording was better, and although both had good flowing verses, I feel like YDK's verse was more simple. In this case, it might have hurt him (in my eyes, at least)

vRakontur

08-18-2015, 03:16 PM	#5
Razah rockkFresh Join Date: Apr 2015 Location: Chicago. Posts: 1,088 Battle Record: 8-10 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 11328545	So, Im'a just quote the shit I didn't like. "Leaving a lifeless being more crispy wing. Kentucky fried while alive, rendered cheap" That couplet ruined the piece for me. YDK: "Because I still have to clear my computers history." I thought that was funny, but, it didn't fit well. Should've just stayed serious if ya' ask me. I liked Rakontur's verse more. The wording was better, and although both had good flowing verses, I feel like YDK's verse was more simple. In this case, it might have hurt him (in my eyes, at least) vRakontur