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08-13-2015, 12:11 PM
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I like the closing line, real nice, never seen that before.
As for the rhyme scheme, real solid, i like. The only part im not a fan of is: I'm the monster hiding under the canopy bed under the canapoy head hurts my head, i understand it helps set up the following rhyme scheme, but it hurts my head as a image. Other than that, good writing. |
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