lego builder

K Panda · 08-07-2015, 10:29 AM

1st and foremost, consider your audience. Im sure you can rhyme, but making sense to the people youre speaking to is important too. picture a battle whre a dude raps liek a dictionary, and the other like a standard comedian. Both rhyme, but the comedian will use easier imagery and punchlines, to assure the delivery doesnt go over the audiences head. The rapping dictionary, might not consider that as much and is more likely to call the audience idots for not understanding.

Some parts also dont rhyme very well, reads more like poetry or spoken word:

Im right here tho in high quality they all wanna listen
a savior to save im on a mission beyond the cradles and graves

your introduction of "graves" as a primary rhyme is rather rough.

Dont get me wrong, you're good, just giving feedback to help, no use in dickriding.

08-07-2015, 10:29 AM	#1
K Panda Member Join Date: Aug 2015 Posts: 46 Rep Power: 0	1st and foremost, consider your audience. Im sure you can rhyme, but making sense to the people youre speaking to is important too. picture a battle whre a dude raps liek a dictionary, and the other like a standard comedian. Both rhyme, but the comedian will use easier imagery and punchlines, to assure the delivery doesnt go over the audiences head. The rapping dictionary, might not consider that as much and is more likely to call the audience idots for not understanding. Some parts also dont rhyme very well, reads more like poetry or spoken word: Im right here tho in high quality they all wanna listen a savior to save im on a mission beyond the cradles and graves your introduction of "graves" as a primary rhyme is rather rough. Dont get me wrong, you're good, just giving feedback to help, no use in dickriding.