AOWL Week 10: Adonis (4-2) VS. ZeeDee (3-2) [ZEEDEE WINS, 7-0.]

IamBenT · 04-25-2013, 10:33 AM

Close battle.

Adonis - My man, such poetic vibe and feel. I liked how you began this, it was a solid piece all the way, really liked the attention to details from the birth to the growing up and its a really chilling picture of what we can become with big Brother watching over our shoulders. Dope all around, only some parts did the wording seem awkward.

We sharpen wit with fists, equipped stainless,
The steel – Extension of the arm; the palm – Brainless,
No qualm with ending life because our lives, blameless,
We were molded until we only say, “Yes sir”!

Dope, loved all of this here, the tension, the word choice, and the smooth flawless rhyming.

ZeeDee - Holy shit you did not disappoint at all. Killer flow, only a few wording places where I feel if you cut out a word or two it would have made the shit work even tighter, but its just so ambitious in places and really becomes hot fire throughout. So much fun to read and you do such a great job in setting up image after image in an impactful way. So far this Zy's and RG's verses are in contention for my VOTW. Fantastic.

Our towers and coves are bathing in flames over the sacred terrain
They're claiming their hate is done to cleanse our land of native mistakes
By erasing our fate and beating our women who are traded and raped
Only way to escape is through a trail of blood that's made to their graves

Just wow lyricism right here

At the entrance of our raptured village lies a tall oak tree that has sunk....
Deep into the ground from branches holding pounds of all our leaders they've hung

Chillingly dope

Great battle, gonna be close.

Vote -ZeeDee came with that fire and powerful execution against a solid Adonis verse.

04-25-2013, 10:33 AM	#1
IamBenT SuPreaM Lyricyst Join Date: Feb 2013 Location: San Antonio, TX Posts: 704 Battle Record: 9-6 Rep Power: 412358	Close battle. Adonis - My man, such poetic vibe and feel. I liked how you began this, it was a solid piece all the way, really liked the attention to details from the birth to the growing up and its a really chilling picture of what we can become with big Brother watching over our shoulders. Dope all around, only some parts did the wording seem awkward. We sharpen wit with fists, equipped stainless, The steel – Extension of the arm; the palm – Brainless, No qualm with ending life because our lives, blameless, We were molded until we only say, “Yes sir”! Dope, loved all of this here, the tension, the word choice, and the smooth flawless rhyming. ZeeDee - Holy shit you did not disappoint at all. Killer flow, only a few wording places where I feel if you cut out a word or two it would have made the shit work even tighter, but its just so ambitious in places and really becomes hot fire throughout. So much fun to read and you do such a great job in setting up image after image in an impactful way. So far this Zy's and RG's verses are in contention for my VOTW. Fantastic. Our towers and coves are bathing in flames over the sacred terrain They're claiming their hate is done to cleanse our land of native mistakes By erasing our fate and beating our women who are traded and raped Only way to escape is through a trail of blood that's made to their graves Just wow lyricism right here At the entrance of our raptured village lies a tall oak tree that has sunk.... Deep into the ground from branches holding pounds of all our leaders they've hung Chillingly dope Great battle, gonna be close. Vote -ZeeDee came with that fire and powerful execution against a solid Adonis verse. __________________ *A.bove T.he R.est* IamBenT\|Genocide\|MikeWrecka\|Objective\|Vulgar\|Witty \|Rawn MacDon