Ace 1-0 vs Remy LeBeau 1-0 {Ace wins}

[Hush]

Netcees Battle League Season VIII

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Due Dates:

• Verses are due Thursday, July 16th 2015 11:59 PM PST. and will be open until the following Sunday
• Battles that lack votes may close later.
• One sided battles may get closed early.
• Extensions are 24 hours

Line Limit:

• Minimum of 12, maximum of 18
• If not agreed upon, second drop must match length of the first

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First to 5, win by at least two votes


@Ace 1-0 vs @Remy LeBeau 1-0

[Ace]

Originally Posted by Remy LeBeau

If ur looking for light reading I would go with Joe abercrombie or Brent weeks night angel. Night angel is an assassin/magic book

Aiyyo
Put them magic books down u nerd.. that shit is weird
Cuz ur social status doesn't need a smoke bomb, bitch.. to the world you've already disappeared.
Bro u can save ur fake personals. I'm gonna beat ur ass..
I'll hook you so hard ur 'head will be in a Spiral' like you fell asleep in class.
This week will pass & u'll stay a virgin, this geek showed me his plan..
Fuck a Gambit. Nigga ur sex life is the only thing that's gonna explode from your hand.
If beating me is ur biggest feat then buddy u got wrong views..
Cuz that'll be relying on the Impossibles to juggernaut ur career like Tom Cruise.
C'mon son. When the revolver spits your whole core's bobbled..
Call me Acura. My cylinder's leavin this RL X'd on the fuckin floor modeled.
You gettin outworked, boy. If I let u live u better thank Christ..
Cuz u gettin Drilled. You have half a Vault's chance & this is a perfect bank heist.
So now ur left marred, scared.. I'll split you.. this aint a hard spare..
Cut the brave shit, faggot. I just made you lose ur Nerve quicker than chemical warfare.
Mahfucka.
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[Allen Knight]

Remy Lebeau verse

Find this dude love, shit..even cupid would balk.
I gotta plot to merk u, so he made a thread pointing out how fuckn stupid u talk.
I don't think uve EVER had pussy, man that shit is lame and tragic.
Girls rain checked him so much he followed the rainbow.. n became a fgt.
Ur not a gangster, torture him till this man is a vegetable.
so if dude caught a charge..its thru the cables I got clamped to his testicles.
I'm beating u. That's pretty much 'nuff said.
no discussion, you'll be adding MY name to YOUR list in Hush's thread.
Chinese? Japanese? All we know is ur Asian.
So when u act like a big baby, all we WANT to know is what's ur relation.
I write to crush, make u bite the dust bro u messing with a tiger.
Just say good night n hush, cuz even u know.. they both slept u in the cypher.
U know ur girls not faithful, ur too skinny, s'why she likes it when I ride n break her.
Last time u did a pull up..was changing diapers on a kid who looks alot like ur neighbor.

[Mr. J]

Bro u can save ur fake personals. I'm gonna beat ur ass..
I'll hook you so hard ur 'head will be in a Spiral' like you fell asleep in class.
This week will pass & u'll stay a virgin, this geek showed me his plan..
Fuck a Gambit. Nigga ur sex life is the only thing that's gonna explode from your hand.

C'mon son. When the revolver spits your whole core's bobbled..
Call me Acura. My cylinder's leavin this RL X'd on the fuckin floor modeled
^^^^
I feel like these were your strongest bars & they came smoother than the rest
I really didn't enjoy that opener nor the closer, they seemed kind of bland for me
other than that you really connected some of these lines together & kept it lulz worthy
had you kept the same edge throughout the verse you'd have a more impressive verse
regardless, this was clean

I don't think uve EVER had pussy, man that shit is lame and tragic.
Girls rain checked him so much he followed the rainbow.. n became a fgt.
Ur not a gangster, torture him till this man is a vegetable.
so if dude caught a charge..its thru the cables I got clamped to his testicles.

Chinese? Japanese? All we know is ur Asian.
So when u act like a big baby, all we WANT to know is what's ur relation.
^^^^
as for your verse I thought these lines were your best
I understand all the discussion references but I was like eh...
maybe if you worded them properly they would have hit harder
but you did have a few lines that had me like 'ok...thats cool'
other than that I feel like you brought it as strong as your opponent

v/Remy, I felt like his verse had a better set of lines to work with
although it seemed rushed it still had some scathing lines for me to enjoy
other than that, I felt like his opponent kind of stumbled with that opener
I thought the concept was cool but I just didn't like the whole set up
and that closer didn't really make it any better for him, either way...
dope battle fella's

[Amen.]

smoke bomb was a little stretched, think you could have had a harder execution
spiral was a cool concept but execution was mild
gambit/explode in hand was dope
tom cruise was mild
RLX had potential but execution was mild
drilled/vaults had potential as well but again, execution was mild
chemical warfare was ok

vs

plot to merk was mild
rain check was ok lol typical gay bash tho
caught a charge was good
discussion reference was ok
big bag was mild
night/hush/cypher reference was cool but wordin was choppy
pull up was good lol

Remy got it on consistency

[Bash]

Spiral, gambit, RLX

Vs

Caught a charge, hush thread, cypher, pull up

VRemy. Got him winning by a quote but overall I say his verse hit a bit harder. Better read though so props to both

[Hush]

Originally Posted by Ace

Aiyyo
Put them magic books down u nerd.. that shit is weird
Cuz ur social status doesn't need a smoke bomb, bitch.. to the world you've already disappeared.
this is good but its eh, magic books and smoke bombs.. arent smoke bombs ninja shit? the connection vague af b
Bro u can save ur fake personals. I'm gonna beat ur ass..
I'll hook you so hard ur 'head will be in a Spiral' like you fell asleep in class.
ok, but this light
This week will pass & u'll stay a virgin, this geek showed me his plan..
Fuck a Gambit. Nigga ur sex life is the only thing that's gonna explode from your hand.
thats dope
If beating me is ur biggest feat then buddy u got wrong views..
Cuz that'll be relying on the Impossibles to juggernaut ur career like Tom Cruise.
i dont get why u used the word juggernaut in here.. i never saw the tom cruise movies but i feel like u said juggernaut just bcuz its a xmen tie in, but it dont help the punch.. it just makes the wording awkward
C'mon son. When the revolver spits your whole core's bobbled..
Call me Acura. My cylinder's leavin this RL X'd on the fuckin floor modeled.
love the concept, but on the floor modeled? its not nrmal speach. nobody talks this way so it makes the punch fizzle for me
You gettin outworked, boy. If I let u live u better thank Christ..
Cuz u gettin Drilled. You have half a Vault's chance & this is a perfect bank heist.
lol ok. honesty i dont think this is resin or ur mad rusty or u didnt try, ur shit in the cypha was way fresher.. half a vaults chance? thats not even a cliche or a idiom b. this is me being 100 with u no sneak diss shit, this line just aint hot brodie. no offense. the getting drilled/bank hiest shit i get, and i see u wanted to add another layer to it, but nah
So now ur left marred, scared.. I'll split you.. this aint a hard spare..
Cut the brave shit, faggot. I just made you lose ur Nerve quicker than chemical warfare.
nice, simple but it hits. not to bone pick but that setup was baaaaad my guy
Mahfucka.
.
.
.

Originally Posted by Allen Knight

Remy Lebeau verse

Find this dude love, shit..even cupid would balk.
I gotta plot to merk u, so he made a thread pointing out how fuckn stupid u talk.
eh
I don't think uve EVER had pussy, man that shit is lame and tragic.
Girls rain checked him so much he followed the rainbow.. n became a fgt.
ok
Ur not a gangster, torture him till this man is a vegetable.
so if dude caught a charge..its thru the cables I got clamped to his testicles.
lol ok but yo, this is why battling is a nuance thing to me.. why didnt u say thru cables he clamps to his own testicles then imply hes some kinda wierdo, bcuz this kinda makes u seem wierd lol
I'm beating u. That's pretty much 'nuff said.
no discussion, you'll be adding MY name to YOUR list in Hush's thread.
heads up, if a thread isnt on the first page with TONs of posts during the time ur dorpping ur verse it can hurt u. this line fell flat imho
Chinese? Japanese? All we know is ur Asian.
So when u act like a big baby, all we WANT to know is what's ur relation.
light
I write to crush, make u bite the dust bro u messing with a tiger.
Just say good night n hush, cuz even u know.. they both slept u in the cypher.
ehhh
U know ur girls not faithful, ur too skinny, s'why she likes it when I ride n break her.
Last time u did a pull up..was changing diapers on a kid who looks alot like ur neighbor.
light

Remy had a WAYYY doper verse last week imho, this verse was flat. It wasn't bad, but it had no jaw droppers, no oh shit lines. Which made it not very memorable. Ace had some concepts but had some REALLY bad wording at times which really suprised me. It seems like both these dudes came halfway at each other. Maybe they didnt go for the throat cuz they both old school aliases? I dont know but this battle is honestly a let down for me. It didnt want a debateable I wanted to see someone catch a hommy.


The best line of the battle was that Gambit/jerkoff line. Remy you had too many namedrops and references, you should of just punched cuz the rainbow and charge lines were your best bars. Charge line was actually really really dope but the wording could of been more offensive to him, more of a attack. Ace verse just read funny in places, like if you say some of that stuff outloud it just dont sound normal. I get this is text but that just is a pet peeve of mine.

Vote Ace


could of went either way. Rep to both but I hope you niggas bring it next week. Also ya'll should rematch at some point cuz this could of been much more.

[Pinot Grij]

Bro u can save ur fake personals. I'm gonna beat ur ass..
I'll hook you so hard ur 'head will be in a Spiral' like you fell asleep in class.
This week will pass & u'll stay a virgin, this geek showed me his plan..
Fuck a Gambit. Nigga ur sex life is the only thing that's gonna explode from your hand.
If beating me is ur biggest feat then buddy u got wrong views..
Cuz that'll be relying on the Impossibles to juggernaut ur career like Tom Cruise.

best shit from Ace - although Tom Cruise is still famous without the MI movies, but that's just nitpicky... everything else seemed a little oddly worded for me.

Remy

I don't think uve EVER had pussy, man that shit is lame and tragic.
Girls rain checked him so much he followed the rainbow.. n became a fgt.

I don't know why, but these types of lines crack me up - where it's all an elaborate setup to say that the dude is gay... hahaha. After this, the testicles line was a little too in depth, not feelin. Also, seen those "who can't you beat" thread bars a couple times now - not that impactful for me... too easy of a concept. Everything else was a little too much of an inside joke that I'm not on the inside of..

Vote -- Ace for better wordplay and more accessible concepts.

[Orc]

Put them magic books down u nerd.. that shit is weird
Cuz ur social status doesn't need a smoke bomb, bitch.. to the world you've already disappeared.
wordy but nice
Bro u can save ur fake personals. I'm gonna beat ur ass..
I'll hook you so hard ur 'head will be in a Spiral' like you fell asleep in class.
not feeling
This week will pass & u'll stay a virgin, this geek showed me his plan..
Fuck a Gambit. Nigga ur sex life is the only thing that's gonna explode from your hand.
dope dope dope
If beating me is ur biggest feat then buddy u got wrong views..
Cuz that'll be relying on the Impossibles to juggernaut ur career like Tom Cruise.
feeling this. yep
C'mon son. When the revolver spits your whole core's bobbled..
Call me Acura. My cylinder's leavin this RL X'd on the fuckin floor modeled.
not feeling
You gettin outworked, boy. If I let u live u better thank Christ..
Cuz u gettin Drilled. You have half a Vault's chance & this is a perfect bank heist.
not feeling
So now ur left marred, scared.. I'll split you.. this aint a hard spare..
Cut the brave shit, faggot. I just made you lose ur Nerve quicker than chemical warfare.
not feeling

vs

Find this dude love, shit..even cupid would balk.
I gotta plot to merk u, so he made a thread pointing out how fuckn stupid u talk.
okay cool, old np but relative to current events
I don't think uve EVER had pussy, man that shit is lame and tragic.
Girls rain checked him so much he followed the rainbow.. n became a fgt.
this isn't good. why r ppl quoting it
Ur not a gangster, torture him till this man is a vegetable.
so if dude caught a charge..its thru the cables I got clamped to his testicles.
okay but nothing stellar bro
I'm beating u. That's pretty much 'nuff said.
no discussion, you'll be adding MY name to YOUR list in Hush's thread
not enough wit to it
Chinese? Japanese? All we know is ur Asian.
So when u act like a big baby, all we WANT to know is what's ur relation.
nice, feeling this
I write to crush, make u bite the dust bro u messing with a tiger.
Just say good night n hush, cuz even u know.. they both slept u in the cypher.
nah played man night/knight
U know ur girls not faithful, ur too skinny, s'why she likes it when I ride n break her.
Last time u did a pull up..was changing diapers on a kid who looks alot like ur neighbor.
not feeling

if Ace is Resin then he's really rusty. i don't think it is tho. too choppy. just someone using the style for votes imo. anyway the Gambit line was fire bro. the impossibles was nice and the opener was slick too. the rest fell flat to me. Remy wasn't as nice as last week and used a lot of bars which fell flat imo. just needs to add a little more wit to his execution and he'll be straight. the concepts are there it's just the wording makes them lack a lil sting.

i have Ace taking it by a couple

[Saint]

I have Ace... RL, spiral was cool.. gambit was nice, funny... seemed kinda lazy on son execution of some concepts...

Remy was good too - pull up, rain check were standouts, no real misses, but some light stuff, but decent verse.

Vote ace

[ill nik-A]

resin...

Smoke bomb was dope, gambit and Tom cruise was good, the rest was aight except ender I didn't like

Remy, opener and big baby were cool, the rainbow line was really bad, slept u in cypher was bad too

I got Ace

[Allen Knight]

Put them magic books down u nerd.. that shit is weird
Cuz ur social status doesn't need a smoke bomb, bitch.. to the world you've already disappeared.
This week will pass & u'll stay a virgin, this geek showed me his plan..
Fuck a Gambit. Nigga ur sex life is the only thing that's gonna explode from your hand.
If beating me is ur biggest feat then buddy u got wrong views..
Cuz that'll be relying on the Impossibles to juggernaut ur career like Tom Cruise.


Vs


Find this dude love, shit..even cupid would balk.
I gotta plot to merk u, so he made a thread pointing out how fuckn stupid u talk.
I'm beating u. That's pretty much 'nuff said.
no discussion, you'll be adding MY name to YOUR list in Hush's thread.


V/ace, cool battle, remy had some ideas but acouple feel flat. ace was more creative
here an had a dope opener. good shit props.

[Hush]

Ace wins 6-2