Dr Dog vs Zen (Zen wins)

[UnbornBuddha]

Zen in a lot of ways this is very much like your more hip hop based verses. Often times you don't go for a big spectacle, you know the road less taken. Instead, you write in a manner with an ode to the common man in mind. It's nothing too flashy, and often times not as ambitious, or creative as you can be. However, there is still this developed voice that shines throughout. If other less experienced writers wrote as you did, they would probably end up with a subpar creation. However, because of the realism in which you depict your feelings, emotions, and whatnot you end up stealing the heart of the reader, momentarily mind you.

Split, I am curious at what you do, you are very selective with your wording and the thoughts you portray, which denotes a career in academia perhaps. As for the piece itself, I thought it was good. It was layered with meaning, but perhaps less elusive as some of your other work. I thought the indenture approach, infused with the digital age, was a bit less interesting as what you began with. Which was poking fun at the connotation of certain words we hear so often, and the meanings we assume they mean, and so we derive certain expectations from them. I think if you kept with that, instead of switching gears into a more modern "freedom" approach you would of had this.

Vote: Zen