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Old 07-12-2015, 08:21 PM   #12
Mr. J
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They call me Mandingo when I sling the D to broads
Your girl's a slut, every time u fuck u feel like Diddy at the Bet awards
But when she's with me I turn your girl into a geyser
Everything u say is horse shit, they only let u in the Farm cuz they needed fertilizer
And I'll rob u just for kicks, doesn't matter whether my pockets'll fatten
I got that 12 gauge, one blast and you'll be everywhere at once like Dr. Manhattan

^^^^
This section was dope, I really enjoyed that JPP bar too
that Joe Metts line was pretty funny too, dope shit all around
the only bar I didn't really get was the Bags line, but this was a tight verse regardless

Your wifey ain't faithful we fuck a lotta nights, boo's face gets creamed
Ya whole bed a mess... & nigga you can switch those covers out yourself like 2K16
1 minute u coulda been loc, next u was almost piru... stop pretendin for street props
How u got blue on the left AND red on the right but ain't wearin Kendrick's new reeboks
If u ain't grippin them things I'm comin thru & clippin ur wings
This grave I'm diggin is reeeealll spacious kid, it's fit for a King

^^^^^^
this section was dope on the opposite end, but the rest seemed filler ish
I couldn't fuck with that AXE line, and that opening line felt kind of cheesy
but other then that you had that contender match line which worked for you
I felt had you worded some of your lines properly it would have came off smoother
but I felt like you slipped far too much in the beginning...either way nice work


v/Karaoke, He came with an all around stinging verse, a few misfires
but the whole flow of the piece was so slick, it didn't effect it too much
as for the contender, I felt like his opener seemed off & didn't work well
the NYSE thing kind of backfired, the concept was cool, but the wording didn't work
Karaoke just had more lines that hit as opposed to the other guy...
nice battle though...
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