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Old 07-11-2015, 03:58 PM   #10
Mr. J
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U really need help from Sharp's clique cos I bruise phonies & chumps
But I don't care who the Pharmacist, I just know u'll need codeine from one

This fake vet just goes up and down while I keep riding to victory
Ur style is old, u don't belong in this ErraTic & that describes ur consistency

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these lines were the ones that stuck out to me..
I thought that opener could have a better hit to work
that closer was an almost, but to connect it you should have used 'poor trait'
you had image & idol working for you, maybe mess with the wording
decent verse though..

I can rearrange limbs but you can’t change, you’ll always be lame kid
Look..I Constituent to a Whole new body, and you’d STILL be the same bitch
I never quit, so I’ll fire close range at body parts when I find ya…
& put bullets Interagency Breakdown that’d rival stock markets in China

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I'm going to do the opposite of your verse & say there is too much happening here
the punches work, but these just felt a tad overdone to me, otherwise your verse was slick
after that waving max line I was like ok, and I realized you brought thatwork

v/Tic

I feel like he came with a hotter verse compared to Max's
Max brought some smooth ideas but didn't hit as hard as Tic had the stronger verse here
dope battle fella's
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