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The Clown Prince
Join Date: Apr 2013
Posts: 5,046
Battle Record: 35-45
Champed - Art of Writing League
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U really need help from Sharp's clique cos I bruise phonies & chumps
But I don't care who the Pharmacist, I just know u'll need codeine from one This fake vet just goes up and down while I keep riding to victory Ur style is old, u don't belong in this ErraTic & that describes ur consistency ^^^ these lines were the ones that stuck out to me.. I thought that opener could have a better hit to work that closer was an almost, but to connect it you should have used 'poor trait' you had image & idol working for you, maybe mess with the wording decent verse though.. I can rearrange limbs but you can’t change, you’ll always be lame kid Look..I Constituent to a Whole new body, and you’d STILL be the same bitch I never quit, so I’ll fire close range at body parts when I find ya… & put bullets Interagency Breakdown that’d rival stock markets in China ^^^ I'm going to do the opposite of your verse & say there is too much happening here the punches work, but these just felt a tad overdone to me, otherwise your verse was slick after that waving max line I was like ok, and I realized you brought thatwork v/Tic I feel like he came with a hotter verse compared to Max's Max brought some smooth ideas but didn't hit as hard as Tic had the stronger verse here dope battle fella's
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