AOWL Week 10: Mike Wrecka (5-4) VS. Nigma (4-3) [NIGMA WINS, 8-2.]

[Nigma]

Those Shaky Spirit Days
“In preparing... I have always found that plans are useless, but planning is indispensable.”

Yes, I intended that you'd read this.. Wait

These demon creatures team as mates
Creators scheme to break us
Plan to place us beasts in cages
Then our dreamscape changes
Can't e-scape each others gazes hey?
At first it feels so great
But then it causes grief and takes off
Hung unseen beneath the shade
If we went to reach this day,
I know we won't, which seems okay
But to go and see, to know completely
Don't it seem so great? Would this stoic ego break?
Will the seeds of change grow or freeze in place?
Too cold for me to say, suppose the moment leaped away...
Mold off green, decay and fade into diseased mistakes
But will the gold retreat to grey?
Will the cold impeach the rays?
I hold the key to free the slave
But do I leave this cage or re-chain Django and plead my case?
Do I believe in fate? Maybe she's my lady
Baby, I need you.. What, no, we agreed to break up
Said our feelings changed, that's strange though
I remained faithful in case we were to be complete again
Since lately I'm thinking it would feel so great to see your face
Embrace you, quiet your fears and wipe your tears away
But face it, we're weird again and each have careers to chase
So here's to dreary days awake and trapped in the passed re-enacted
Can't just grab the nearest plane or path to craft my advancement
Can't just take a gal and fly away the way Aladdin did Jasmine
We agreed to scrap it, won't tamper the plans
Since interacting in the past wouldn't actually happen
If planning to plan wasn't planned in advance hmm?
That's that, happy packing, with good there is bad
You can't, in person, gather your words when you have to
Then in text you go berserk, end up burstin and spazzin
Talkin personal matters you don't dare blurt when we're gathered
And if I don't reply the words you imagine, the worst of infractions
Immersed in more drama than rehearsals for acting
Thoughts to flourish, abandoned, nah survive by a thread
Alive but the purpose is shattered, a worthless cadaver
No time to waste in days you aren't sure are your last
Maybe work our way past with encouraging laughter
We strayed away from mundane, all I'm sure of is that...
I stepped inside the cage one way and emerged a new man
What I learned in the shackles was worth the entrapment
It's that plans don't have to be perfect to have them

[Mike Wrecka]

a flash of white light ignites a horrible sound,
as a meteorite crashes, hard into the ground/
I fall down, from all the tremors im trembling,
look around, as black clouds are directly assembling/
this crowd wasn't expecting, such a turn of events,
we weren't prepared, this just doesn't make any sense/
as the many fragments, disperse into the air,
every living creature on this planet, is visibly scared/
instantly aware, that things are about to get drastic,
im angry because I literally put all my eggs in one basket/
no one stands a chance, under this circumstance,
some stare in a trance, while others try to advance/
but I physically cant, so im seeking support,
try to reach out for help, but it seems that my arms are too short/
my vision distorts, I contort feeling weak and defenseless,
getting trampled by those, I would normally eat for breakfast/
a wall of fire is approaching and the heats tremendous,
Ive always been a loner, but now I seek acceptance/
some funnel into tunnels that are completely endless,
while others take to the air , extremely reckless/
but im alone in the chaos, my resolve withers,
no plan for this, our species should have evolved quicker/
I figure that the galaxy lacks respect,
or why would they want to destroy me, a tyrannosaurus rex/
but hey if you gotta go, we all goin out with style,
except as im consumed by the flames, I see a mammal smile /

[Split]

nigma

go listen to Opposites Attract by Kendrick Lamar, immediately. specifically the spoken word/ def jam poet w/e at the end.

If we went to reach this day,
I know we won't, which seems okay
But to go and see, to know completely
Don't it seem so great? Would this stoic ego break?
Will the seeds of change grow or freeze in place?

nice.

But face it, we're weird again and each have careers to chase
So here's to dreary days awake and trapped in the passed re-enacted
Can't just grab the nearest plane or path to craft my advancement
Can't just take a gal and fly away the way Aladdin did Jasmine

wow. that shit speaks.

Thoughts to flourish, abandoned, nah survive by a thread
Alive but the purpose is shattered, a worthless cadaver
No time to waste in days you aren't sure are your last
Maybe work our way past with encouraging laughter
We strayed away from mundane, all I'm sure of is that...
I stepped inside the cage one way and emerged a new man

flawless, seamless scheme switch.

incredible verse. everything was in place and executed perfectly.

mw.

aha from the "eggs in one basket" line i realized this was about the extinction event. really enlightening glimpse about how 'what is meant to be' is really just a reflection of everything that has happened in the past, and we are at the mercy of faith, by nature

lyrically another impressive verse.

but im alone in the chaos, my resolve withers,
no plan for this, our species should have evolved quicker/

that sticks out to me. powerful wording throughout


I thought both were creative takes on the topic, MW's in the sense of being unconventional and Nigma's in the sense of showing how a relationship revolves around both the course it is taken and the expectations for how it is heading at any given moment/ the moment it was conceived. and especially how these are not explicitly tied together as you would expect.

V/ Nigma. really enjoyed the insight he provided/ how he expounded on the topic this week.

[Objective]

My vote gets edited in here in about 10-20 minutes. don't close it yet.

Edit:

Nigma: Great showing. The flow and rhyme-structure throughout was on point and well crafted imo. Some interesting lines in there but would like it to go more in depth on the subject matter rather than just scratching the surface of why it went wrong, but that's nitpicking. You followed the topic well with a theme I didn't see coming, cool. The closure couldn't have been better, loved everything about the last 3-4 lines. You caught my attention with the opener and the closure left me with a good impression of your piece, well done.

Mike Wrecka: Haha, I didn't see that coming. A muh'fuckin' T-Rex, huh? Creative twist to the story. It was kinda short, but that's cool, I can enjoy short pieces. You did the topic justice and the rhymescheme was decent. I liked the approach you were taking and enjoyed the read.

My vote goes to Nigma. While Mike Wrecka wins on the creativity department and went all-out with it I felt that Nigma gets it on consistency, rhyme structure, interesting lines and story. Mike Wrecka had a good showing for sure but looking at the stories at hand and picking a winner I think Nigma edges it in this one with a more serious tone to his verse and stuff that made me think. I just can't get how an animal whose closest relative on earth today is the chicken can plan and/or evaluate the situation like a human being, but then again, the verse was all fiction so everything goes I guess. Either way I think Nigma got it. MW's verse was enjoyable for sure, but he didn't show me enough to snatch my vote.