11. Sn00p vs. Clutterbuck - (Clutterbuck wins)

mayniuhh · 06-02-2015, 06:10 PM

(Disclaimer: I really enjoy words. I enjoy being gifted intentioned to be great work and I always will. Thank you and thank everyone. I usually keep my own relationship with words out of how I judge except for... well quite literally always.)

In short, I felt as if you both approached the image in a very similar (and well, kinda the opposite of abstract) manner. Because of that I feel uncomfortable accusing either of your pieces of being more creative. That said, there's a small, but obvious skill gap here that deserves to be acknowledged.

Above all, a story is a series of relevant details. A line that helps establish the scene is relevant if the scene isn't already established without it. I saw a lot of unnecessary lines that simply did not add any real dimension to either story and could've been replaced with truly magic moments. During both reads I was finding it difficult to care for this reason.

War VS Peace seems a neat way of framing the efforts on display. I Simply though that sn00p's piece was more gracefully written.

Vote: sn00p

06-02-2015, 06:10 PM	#10
mayniuhh Wes Gil is a faggot Join Date: May 2015 Location: Philly Posts: 92 Rep Power: 6085833	(Disclaimer: I really enjoy words. I enjoy being gifted intentioned to be great work and I always will. Thank you and thank everyone. I usually keep my own relationship with words out of how I judge except for... well quite literally always.) In short, I felt as if you both approached the image in a very similar (and well, kinda the opposite of abstract) manner. Because of that I feel uncomfortable accusing either of your pieces of being more creative. That said, there's a small, but obvious skill gap here that deserves to be acknowledged. Above all, a story is a series of relevant details. A line that helps establish the scene is relevant if the scene isn't already established without it. I saw a lot of unnecessary lines that simply did not add any real dimension to either story and could've been replaced with truly magic moments. During both reads I was finding it difficult to care for this reason. War VS Peace seems a neat way of framing the efforts on display. I Simply though that sn00p's piece was more gracefully written. Vote: sn00p