Crash landed into Neo Cortex

UnbornBuddha · 05-23-2015, 01:11 AM

A short succinct verse, and it seemed to have tidbits and allusions to life as a race. Rapidity as a key toward completion and docility as the enemy toward completion. The chase toward the grand finale, the finish line, was what the images suggested. Reading your most recent piece, this is an entirely different mode of depiction. This one carried more momentum, more ideals, as the other one carried more detours into abstraction, and metaphorical inclination. I liked this piece for it kept delving deeper into a journey that did not carry us anywhere into a far away land, rather it took us into a mode of being, in which your emotion, and all the commonalities between our lives came together for a short moment. The end ended in a baleful and menacing manner that instilled a premonition of doom almost. Not my favorite ending, but the piece stands as a enjoyable read nonetheless.

Thank you.

05-23-2015, 01:11 AM	#6
UnbornBuddha Senior Member Join Date: Jul 2014 Posts: 1,008 Battle Record: 23-10 Champed - Art of Writing League - AOWL Season 5 Rep Power: 23856379	A short succinct verse, and it seemed to have tidbits and allusions to life as a race. Rapidity as a key toward completion and docility as the enemy toward completion. The chase toward the grand finale, the finish line, was what the images suggested. Reading your most recent piece, this is an entirely different mode of depiction. This one carried more momentum, more ideals, as the other one carried more detours into abstraction, and metaphorical inclination. I liked this piece for it kept delving deeper into a journey that did not carry us anywhere into a far away land, rather it took us into a mode of being, in which your emotion, and all the commonalities between our lives came together for a short moment. The end ended in a baleful and menacing manner that instilled a premonition of doom almost. Not my favorite ending, but the piece stands as a enjoyable read nonetheless. Thank you.