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Old 05-07-2015, 05:39 PM   #6
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deadman, As I started out your verse I was very drawn in. the way you flow from line to line is incredible to say the least, I enjoy reading your verses when you are rooted into the topic, it always seems to bring out the best in you, it's been awhile since I've seen a new 'dead' verse but you never disappoint when you are on a roll..with lines like

straining for an image to recapture the frames

anyone can see you are here to win..

NYC, You are hit & miss, and this was somewhere in between that vibe that you give. I wanted to like how you started the verse but I read it three times and I didn't feel like that was the best way to start this. regardless as we progress through your verse after the middle you start to let loose and then you really start to shine, after the 5th or 6th line I felt like I knew what kind of piece this would be, making me feel like you were taking a safer route with the verse, it's great, it just didn't have the same edge as dead..


v/deadman, his verse came off with a stronger finish, the verse was well crafted and rounded out really well, NYC could have came stronger with his verse but I feel like he took the safe route compared to the normal level that he normally competes at..this was a nice battle regardless. I enjoyed both pieces.
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