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How can we avoid the lies? Most lessons question all
breaking down necessity when it’s really obsessions’ call you had a vision but was it what taught you to see? I thought this was dope. The middle line was a little shaky for me because the act of 'breaking down necessity' doesn't hold much meaning in and of itself, and the clarifying detail 'when it's really obsessions call' doesn't give that phrase any more meaning or weight. It seams like a throwaway line. But the two lines it was sandwiched between both spoke volumes. tuning out bad vibes doesn’t speak volumes of me being wrong comes with a fee, the price of intellect most answers come from experience despite the internet Interesting, like this. Can't quite figure out the first line, I get the wordplay but I'm not understanding it's meaning. Cool tho. Write more
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