DEAD MAN - OXYGEN BLUES

dead man · 04-18-2013, 12:06 AM

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I think it is interesting, when people stop writing league verses but stay motivated to keep writing (or pretend) their style kinda rebounds back to the baseline.

i think you make a great point here.. and a valid one. its definitely a different experience as far as the thought process when there's nothing specific in the crosshairs.

stay up, keep dropping bro

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fathead · 04-19-2013, 06:19 AM

I Think This Is An Awesome Piece It Seemed 2 Me The Wording And Flow Are perfect Especially In The First Few lines.

try to repent or die where you rest. writing for stress
cyanide vitamin X - Mr. Myers presents: macabre microchip sense
five of them, yes - taste the silence of death
touch pollutants. tight grip around Osiris's breath

Then You Got More Serious Content Without Sacrificing Your flow

how can it hurt when you don't even have a life to regret?
strove to catch a break and caught Perfecta virus instead
is circumstance or instinct why we strive for success,
we buy to possess. which price is the best? excitement or sex?
acrylic surface canvassing inside of my Chest?

Overall I Thought It Was Good Kept A Good Flow The Whole Way Through, Showcased Your Vocabulary, And Mentioned SocIetys Issue Of Materalism.

04-19-2013, 06:19 AM	#2
fathead Member Join Date: Apr 2013 Location: cresson, PA Posts: 30 Battle Record: 1-3 Rep Power: 38	I Think This Is An Awesome Piece It Seemed 2 Me The Wording And Flow Are perfect Especially In The First Few lines. try to repent or die where you rest. writing for stress cyanide vitamin X - Mr. Myers presents: macabre microchip sense five of them, yes - taste the silence of death touch pollutants. tight grip around Osiris's breath Then You Got More Serious Content Without Sacrificing Your flow how can it hurt when you don't even have a life to regret? strove to catch a break and caught Perfecta virus instead is circumstance or instinct why we strive for success, we buy to possess. which price is the best? excitement or sex? acrylic surface canvassing inside of my Chest? Overall I Thought It Was Good Kept A Good Flow The Whole Way Through, Showcased Your Vocabulary, And Mentioned SocIetys Issue Of Materalism.