Is this Boston or Baghdad?

Wise Wiggles · 04-16-2013, 04:26 PM

The funny things that God gets to laugh at..
Is this Boston or Baghdad?
Here's a surprise, theres bombs in the trash cans
8 yr old lost, I feel nauseous for that dad
This carnage is sickening, how they target the innocent
Garbages sizzling blowing arms to oblivion
It's so painful, it's scary. They threw in nails with the bearings
Limbs are dangling barely. This happens when angels are staring?
Say a few words on Facebook & they label it caring
Is there something amusing when hundreds are wounded?
What do they expect to come from the news clips?
Body parts flying got even gaundi's heart crying
Over seas, now our own citizens oddly are dying
I guess standing in a public place you pay the price
Go from watching the race to watching ppl race to save your life
Pulled a war zone out a marathon
Plant a seed then dare the pawn to share the song
Terror drawn with a pair of bombs
Walked in with a pair of legs, now the pair is gone
Who do we put the error on?
Our society or the stations they air it on?
This tragedy put Boston on the map with Sandy Hook
A damning look at madness has every family shook
Create more laws, it still won't solve the hate
At home fall the brave..
Nice to know that terror's only a phone call away

Zen · 04-16-2013, 04:35 PM

Nice piece man. The rhyme scheme was pretty simple but the lines were deep with meaning. The opening was powerful. My favorite line was about the facebook shit. I hate that as well. Post some kind words on facebook to say that you care. If you really cared you'd be helping...but I digress. Very nice piece and fitting for the time after that shit because I feel just like this right now. Frustrated and angry that people could even do this shit. I like it man. Props.

dead man · 04-16-2013, 04:45 PM

you aint never lying man.. cosigning everything you said here.

i really like reading your more serious verses centered on real events. you have a knack for making it glow under your criticisms and commentary.

angels are watching line was fire. so was the opening bit.

I guess standing in a public place you pay the price
Go from watching the race to watching ppl race to save your life
Pulled a war zone out a marathon
Plant a seed then dare the pawn to share the song
Terror drawn with a pair of bombs
Walked in with a pair of legs, now the pair is gone

i know you stay in oregon but heres hoping you werent personally effected by the bombings. even though from a certain point, it's personal for all of us

stay up jefe.

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Dove Dozer · 04-16-2013, 05:28 PM

dope piece.. I wanted to write to this topic as well. you killed it.

The youngest boss. · 04-16-2013, 06:07 PM

Yeah, this was dope. Felt everything. Clean and smooth, too.

Geno · 04-16-2013, 08:31 PM

Fire.

CopyPat · 04-17-2013, 01:01 AM

really really well done man. probly best thing u've ever possted that i've ever read, straight up. Content was bang on, just honest legitness not swayed any certain way with a specific opinion. Flow was effortless yet complex, made this look way too easy. every word choice was perfect, you took everyday words and made it sound dope. really impressive man. this is super awesome. given the touchy subject you pulled it off immaculately. major props. def voting on this for monthly recognition. great open mic

Split · 04-17-2013, 04:30 PM

great piece. smooth is how I'd describe it. simple but effective, hit a lot of strong points. respect.

04-16-2013, 04:26 PM	#1
Wise Wiggles nok Su kow Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,505 Battle Record: 1-1 Rep Power: 51788022	Is this Boston or Baghdad? The funny things that God gets to laugh at.. Is this Boston or Baghdad? Here's a surprise, theres bombs in the trash cans 8 yr old lost, I feel nauseous for that dad This carnage is sickening, how they target the innocent Garbages sizzling blowing arms to oblivion It's so painful, it's scary. They threw in nails with the bearings Limbs are dangling barely. This happens when angels are staring? Say a few words on Facebook & they label it caring Is there something amusing when hundreds are wounded? What do they expect to come from the news clips? Body parts flying got even gaundi's heart crying Over seas, now our own citizens oddly are dying I guess standing in a public place you pay the price Go from watching the race to watching ppl race to save your life Pulled a war zone out a marathon Plant a seed then dare the pawn to share the song Terror drawn with a pair of bombs Walked in with a pair of legs, now the pair is gone Who do we put the error on? Our society or the stations they air it on? This tragedy put Boston on the map with Sandy Hook A damning look at madness has every family shook Create more laws, it still won't solve the hate At home fall the brave.. Nice to know that terror's only a phone call away __________________ "black as midnight..black as pitch blacker than the soul of the foulest witch"

04-16-2013, 04:45 PM	#3
dead man living Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 3,485 Battle Record: 33-18 Accomplishments - Hall of Fame Champed - AOWL Season 1 - Art of Writing League - AOWL Season 4 - Write Week V - GWL Season 1 Rep Power: 77606679	you aint never lying man.. cosigning everything you said here. i really like reading your more serious verses centered on real events. you have a knack for making it glow under your criticisms and commentary. angels are watching line was fire. so was the opening bit. I guess standing in a public place you pay the price Go from watching the race to watching ppl race to save your life Pulled a war zone out a marathon Plant a seed then dare the pawn to share the song Terror drawn with a pair of bombs Walked in with a pair of legs, now the pair is gone i know you stay in oregon but heres hoping you werent personally effected by the bombings. even though from a certain point, it's personal for all of us stay up jefe. 1 __________________ Zack Wicks for president

04-16-2013, 05:28 PM	#4
Dove Dozer loose leaf bruce lee Join Date: Mar 2013 Posts: 1,077 Battle Record: 7-6 Rep Power: 1853216	dope piece.. I wanted to write to this topic as well. you killed it. __________________

04-16-2013, 08:31 PM	#6
Geno White Earl Join Date: Jan 2013 Location: Philly Cat. Posts: 12,354 Battle Record: 10-15 Accomplishments - Open Mic HOF (4x) Champed - Netcees Writers League - Write Week I - Write Week 8 Rep Power: 50036761	Fire. __________________ *-A.bove T.he R.est*

04-17-2013, 04:30 PM	#8
Split . Join Date: Aug 2013 Posts: 8,898 Battle Record: 27-22 Rep Power: 85899398	great piece. smooth is how I'd describe it. simple but effective, hit a lot of strong points. respect. __________________ http://split8.yolasite.com

04-16-2013, 04:35 PM	#2
Zen Arm the Homeless Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,102 Battle Record: 22-24 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 35079722	Nice piece man. The rhyme scheme was pretty simple but the lines were deep with meaning. The opening was powerful. My favorite line was about the facebook shit. I hate that as well. Post some kind words on facebook to say that you care. If you really cared you'd be helping...but I digress. Very nice piece and fitting for the time after that shit because I feel just like this right now. Frustrated and angry that people could even do this shit. I like it man. Props.

04-16-2013, 06:07 PM	#5
The youngest boss. Senior Member Join Date: Feb 2013 Posts: 200 Battle Record: 1-0 Rep Power: 3342428	Yeah, this was dope. Felt everything. Clean and smooth, too.

04-17-2013, 01:01 AM	#7
CopyPat Mic Check Join Date: Mar 2013 Location: Calgary Alberta Canada Posts: 708 Battle Record: 13-10 Rep Power: 3742225	really really well done man. probly best thing u've ever possted that i've ever read, straight up. Content was bang on, just honest legitness not swayed any certain way with a specific opinion. Flow was effortless yet complex, made this look way too easy. every word choice was perfect, you took everyday words and made it sound dope. really impressive man. this is super awesome. given the touchy subject you pulled it off immaculately. major props. def voting on this for monthly recognition. great open mic