Is this Boston or Baghdad?

Zen · 04-16-2013, 04:35 PM

Nice piece man. The rhyme scheme was pretty simple but the lines were deep with meaning. The opening was powerful. My favorite line was about the facebook shit. I hate that as well. Post some kind words on facebook to say that you care. If you really cared you'd be helping...but I digress. Very nice piece and fitting for the time after that shit because I feel just like this right now. Frustrated and angry that people could even do this shit. I like it man. Props.

04-16-2013, 04:35 PM	#1
Zen Arm the Homeless Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,102 Battle Record: 22-24 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 35079722	Nice piece man. The rhyme scheme was pretty simple but the lines were deep with meaning. The opening was powerful. My favorite line was about the facebook shit. I hate that as well. Post some kind words on facebook to say that you care. If you really cared you'd be helping...but I digress. Very nice piece and fitting for the time after that shit because I feel just like this right now. Frustrated and angry that people could even do this shit. I like it man. Props.