AOWL Week 9: ZenLand (4-4) vs. Just Write (0-1) [ZENLAND WINS, 7-2.]

Cereal_Killa · 04-15-2013, 06:54 AM

Zen:

Life = loss.. I like it.. man dope piece, you flushed it with more emotion then usual and dropped some of the tight/smooth structure.. I mean first stanza hit like that tight, fast and you transferred to the direct message with emotion.. which in all honesty I like the switch.. Cool piece and different from what you usually lay out.. nice read mate :)

J Write:

Oh man this was dope.. Not an outrageous twist but a good one none the less.. What made this was your incredible imagery, that intro was brutal.. I could see debree and carnage littering the streets, very vivid.. Rhyme wise it was hot, and all in all real cool piece..

we have calculated the waste of our soldiers times the rate we've lost them in
(could eradicate a forest w/the amount of pine boxes they're lying rotting in)

^ once I hit the pine box part im like WOW

Vote = Just Write

Man this was emotion verses extreme imagery.. The stories I believe where on par with each other and if Zen had edge it up a lil more with his emotion this vote could have easily swung.. awesome match guys, thank for the read n g/l

04-15-2013, 06:54 AM	#1
Cereal_Killa Licking Lily's.. Join Date: Mar 2013 Posts: 706 Battle Record: 11-6 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 3565733	Zen: Life = loss.. I like it.. man dope piece, you flushed it with more emotion then usual and dropped some of the tight/smooth structure.. I mean first stanza hit like that tight, fast and you transferred to the direct message with emotion.. which in all honesty I like the switch.. Cool piece and different from what you usually lay out.. nice read mate :) J Write: Oh man this was dope.. Not an outrageous twist but a good one none the less.. What made this was your incredible imagery, that intro was brutal.. I could see debree and carnage littering the streets, very vivid.. Rhyme wise it was hot, and all in all real cool piece.. we have calculated the waste of our soldiers times the rate we've lost them in (could eradicate a forest w/the amount of pine boxes they're lying rotting in) ^ once I hit the pine box part im like WOW Vote = Just Write Man this was emotion verses extreme imagery.. The stories I believe where on par with each other and if Zen had edge it up a lil more with his emotion this vote could have easily swung.. awesome match guys, thank for the read n g/l __________________ You think YOU'RE sick I shit cough drops ..