WK9: NYCSPITZ (5-3) vs. Soulstice (3-3) [NYCSPITZ wins, 8-0.]

Certain · 12-10-2014, 02:37 AM

Soulstice: This reminded me of a collaboration I did with Split called "Neighborhood" that we could have used a third person on. This would have fit right in with that. I loved the scene setting and the little details, like the fields that are now turf. But the second half of the verse could have used more of that delicate touch.

NYCSPITZ: This was an interesting take on the topic. Thomas Jefferson kind of is going through a second revisionist wind these days, after the era-based racism was exposed and he was reconsidered, people are now saying, "Wait, he was a man of his time but even more he was the man of his time." I'm not sure you fully sold me on the relation to the Mark Twain quote, but your opponent didn't hit the nail on the head there, either. Moreover, your mechanics and rhymes were strong and the portrait was clean.

Vote: NYCSPITZ

12-10-2014, 02:37 AM	#1
Certain Mad fucking dangerous. Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 12,066 Battle Record: 40-19 Champed - AOWL Season 3 - Art of Writing League (2x) Rep Power: 85899406	Soulstice: This reminded me of a collaboration I did with Split called "Neighborhood" that we could have used a third person on. This would have fit right in with that. I loved the scene setting and the little details, like the fields that are now turf. But the second half of the verse could have used more of that delicate touch. NYCSPITZ: This was an interesting take on the topic. Thomas Jefferson kind of is going through a second revisionist wind these days, after the era-based racism was exposed and he was reconsidered, people are now saying, "Wait, he was a man of his time but even more he was the man of his time." I'm not sure you fully sold me on the relation to the Mark Twain quote, but your opponent didn't hit the nail on the head there, either. Moreover, your mechanics and rhymes were strong and the portrait was clean. Vote: NYCSPITZ __________________ I'm just swinging swords strictly based on keyboards, unbalanced like elephants and ants on seesaws.